Mannheim Steamroller wrote:

On second thought, please do not C&C this, as it is obviously
undeserving. I apologize. It was late and felt like a better idea than
it was.

    Try this, go to the last couple of paragraphs in that little C&C bit
and read them over and over... liked the writer's style, wasn't repetative
<a harder trick then you might think> and some real gems in the
dialogue... I agree that the concept was flawed, in MY opinion, but that's
just one C&Cer's pov. Considering the incredible amount of raw garbage
I've inflicted on the list in my time, much of it also written late at
night under the guize of "well it SEEMS like a good idea," I wouldn't let
it bother me too much. Fix it if you think it's broke, shot it if you
think it's suffering and as always... write something new.

    Can't wait to see what you come up with next