Date: Mon, 09 Mar 1998 18:37:44
To: fanfic@fanfic.com
From: "G.L. Sandborn" <sandborn@microlink.net>
Subject: [FFML] Sacheen Littlefeather Literary Society - Week ending 

March 6

Hmmm.... I think you went a little overboard on this one about a couple 
of the points in question:

   1)  Not waking anyone up.  Actually, this house is full of VERY sound 
sleepers.  Ranma only wakes up if he is actually under attack, and not 
always even then (see the canon scenes shortly after Ryouga's arrival).  
Akane is absent.  Genma's as bad as Ranma, and he and Soun are clearly 
not up to full strength.  Nabiki's the only one who might be a light 
sleeper, and we really have no canon, one way or the other, to base that 
on.

   2)  Speaking of that, declaring that Nabiki is "way too together" to 
fall asleep at her desk is fine, if you're writing the fic.  But if you 
accept the idea that she is putting up an exterior while devoting 
herself to managing the household (a common interpretation in fics), 
then it makes perfect sense that she might occasionally "burnout", 
trying to fill both roles.

   3)  The computer was a tolerable item.  I can think of several 
reasons for her to keep both the ledgers/abacus and the computer.  The 
ledgers are probably in shorthand (and possibly coded as well, if she 
includes details of *why* her...clients are willing to part with so much 
money), and Nabiki strikes me as the type to work on an abacus because 
she *enjoys* feeling the numbers flow under her fingers.  At the same 
time, she might want to keep the household finances on the computer so 
somebody else could find them, in an emergency.

   4)  Personally, I thought the P-Chan bit was fine, and not intrusive.  
Matter of personal taste, I guess. 

   I concede the floorplan complaints, but also consider them to be 
minor, correctable with a quick revision.  I found RW's story to be very 
entertaining, WAFF without being overwrought.

   Just my two bits on SLLS of this story.

--Freemage

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