Phillip Masters <PhilMasters@webtv.net> wrote:

	Genma entered the little pool in the backyard with a resonant splash.  
Nodoka raised an eyebrow as a large hairy panda walked out of the
amazingly full 
body of water.  Her husband turned beast growfed at her son, who had
done the 

AAARG!! Word wrap these things properly, willya?

A broken 
water heater, or horror of horrors, a broken gas line must have been the
end of the 
world for its shape changing occupants.

That makes it sound like it must have already happened at some point --
which is probably not what you want to convey here. Try

... a broken gas line would surely be the end of the world for its
shape-changing occupants.

	"I�m sorry, Mrs. Saotome," Akane bowed slightly, "it�s just that I�ve
never 
seen those two look like that exactly.  So... so, caught in the
headlights with one 
hand in the cookie jar, so to speak."

Now there's a mixed metaphor for ya....

as possible.  She held up her hand, catching their attention.  "It may
have been over 
ten years, but at least you, Genma, should remember my rules about
fighting."

It's not her house, though. :p

down.  Four, keep it clean."  Both fighters winced at that one. 
"Lastly, the one who 
looses sets the table."

loses

	Nodoka smiled, as well as Kasumi.  
	Ranma made a seeping hand gesture toward the table.  "Well, pops, looks 

Pops

for years I was enamored by the eldest Tendo daughter.  She was a
goddess to me, 
and still is mind you.  However, I couldn�t tell her, in fact, every
time I saw her or 
heard her I would loose it completely.  I still to this day do not have

lose

Having Ranma suddenly be almost half her size, when he�s usually looking
her in 
the eye is quite a shock.  

was

However, the foreboding feeling she had earlier was coming again, and
she didn�t 
like the ill omen in the air.  A jagged streak of lightning flashed in
the distance, and 
a rolling thunder followed, washing like a wave over the serene
landscape.
	"Hmmm... looks like we�re in for some nasty weather."

Thank you, oh mistress of the obvious! :-)


Not much to say here, except bring on the next part! :)


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics