Cat <travis.mcintosh@student.oc.edu> wrote:
Nerima was quiet.
In many places in the Multiverse this would not be considered
unusual. The fortunate individuals lucky enough to make their homes
in such places would think nothing of a whole day where absolutely
nothing strange happened. They would not be surprised in the least if
[snip]
This is kind of a cliched opening.
There wasn't too much longer to wait. On Saturday afternoon,
in the middle of one of the busiest shopping districts in Nerima there
was an almost blinding flash of light. A few seconds later, a rather
travel weary warrior collapsed onto the road side. She wore a jet black
bandanna which, combined with her short dark brown hair served to
give her a rather exotic, almost European, look. On her back was a
rather heavy looking backpack which seemed to weigh her down
almost to collapsing.
OK, now we're getting somewhere.
Her clothing was simple yet practical, a dark brown shirt and
black pants. On her feet she wore leather traveling shoes bound with
leg bindings to prevent her pants from snagging on whatever strange
form of underbrush she happened to encounter. On her wrist was what
at first glance appeared to be a watch, but, upon closer inspection
seemed to have a trifle to many buttons.
too many
The man stared at the strange young girl for an instance then,
deciding that, for someone who appeared from out of nowhere in a
flash of light, this was probably a valid question, replied, "The earth."
Earth should be capitalized.
Nabiki breathed a sigh of relief. Ok, so far so good, the name at least
was the same at least.
Take out one of the "at least"s.
"And this is Nerima, Japan right?" she continued, trying not to
sound too hopeful. This wasn't actually a problem, seeing as how the
only thing she really had enough energy to sound like was tired.
"Yes," the man responded, cautiously beginning to edge away.
Nabiki tried to smile as he thanked the man.
she
She waited with the patience of a someone perform a routine
of someone performing a routine
task, she had used this thing enough times that she almost didn't even
task. She
As soon as she felt at least mildly presentable she took a deep
breath as cautiously headed for breakfast. Carefully she walked into
breath and cautiously
"Good morning," Kasumi said as she noticed there guest,
their guest
"Do you mind if I get some breakfast?" she asked as she
slowly walked toward the table. As she approached Akane and the
approached, Akane
"No you're not! I'm Nabiki Tendo!" her double spoke up
instantly, seeming very disturbed.
Will the real Nabiki Tendo please stand up?
"So what your trying to say," the Nabiki native to this world
you're
began, after a minute or two of complete silence, "is that you somehow
have the power to travel through different the multidimensional paths
postulated to existed in quantum physics, but somehow, though you
have attained this power, you either lack the ability to direct it, or else
you somehow lost the knowledge of the location of your home
universe."
Pretty big leap of logic there. (The many-worlds interpretation of
quantum theory is not a currently favored one, BTW.)
"You mean," the red head began slowly, "that your really
you're. Your is a possessive: This is your story. You're means "you
are."
Nabiki, but from another dimension, only you somehow became a sort
of world hopping Ryoga," she finished, managing to sound both
world-hopping
"Yea, right," Nabiki's twin seemed to have collected herself,
none of her earlier nervousness was evident. To Nabiki, she seemed
almost harsh in her tone. "What I think, is that this is some new trick
of Cologne's, or maybe your some sort of demon or clone or
^^^^
@bap!
something. Your going to need
^^^^
and again!
story like that," as she spoke Nabiki thought she could almost hear fear
that." As
"Excuse me, but.I don't know you, could I get your name,"
name?"
Ranma stared at her, "You don't know about my curse?" she
asked surprised.
asked, surprised.
"I'm sorry," Nabiki said again once more looking down in
embarrassment. This was a great way to introduce herself. This was a
different world, of course it wouldn't be impossible for Ranma to have
been born a girl, and not a boy. But then, why were the Saotomes here,
and what did she mean by my curse.
curse?
"I think there is something you need to see," Akane said and
said, and
"How.?" she began not sure of a good way to phrase the
began, not
question.
"Pop, took me to Jusenkyou without being able to read
Pop took
"Mr. Saotome?" she asked confident in the response she
asked, confident
"So, how was your rice Nabiki?" Kasumi asked, trying to
rice, Nabiki?"
"This is definitely the best breakfast I've had in months," she
said without the slightest hint of exaggeration. She had forgotten how
good her sisters cooking was.
sister's
"Why thank you," the elder Tendo responded, obviously
pleased, then she added, "but this isn't breakfast, its lunch, you slept
it's lunch
quite a while you know. You must have been very tired." Nabiki
stared, then reflexively glanced down at her wrist. The chronometer
said 12:45. She relaxed, only a bit, a few minutes left, enough to get
her pack. She shuddered at what might have happened. Just a minute
or two more and she could have lost all her supplies, or maybe even
gained and traveling companion.
gained a
"Excuse me I have to get my stuff," she said as she bolted
>from the table. Quickly she found her room, the other Nabiki's room
actually. Luckily, her twin wasn't present, Nabiki was sad that she
present. Nabiki
wouldn't get to talk to girl, but there wouldn't be any time now.
talk to the girl,
"Great thanks a lot," she said rapidly, "I'm all done now," she
Great,
There you go. What do you think? Should I keep it up or go onto to other
things?
I'd like to see more of this. Multi-world stuff can be lots of fun. It's
definitely got some good potential!
Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics