IMHO overall a good story. A few minor annoyances, but nothing major.
The POV was sometimes switched without noticed and the flow paused for a
second until you figured out who was speaking. 

Were these the annoyances you mentioned, or was there something(s) more?

On the up side was the
initial reaction of the members when they heard what she wanted them to
do, Nene's reaction seemed appropriate. Also very well done was how
Sylia came to know Fargo in the first place, very appropriately done.
Overall, an excellent story, I will certainly look forward to any other
stories written by Jeanne and Andy.

Jeanne, Andy, keep up the good work!

Thanks much ^_^



Jeanne Hedge


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