At 20:03 +0000 2/21/98, Gary Kleppe wrote:

This makes it kinda confusing figuring out who's talking. From the way
the names are mentioned, you'd think it was Akane and then Ranma, but
it's actually the other way around. You might want to change this kind
of thing to make it clearer. For example:


"Why don't you deal one card at a time?"  Ranma asked. Akane didn't
bother to look at him.

"I'm doing it, Las-Vegas style."  Akane failed to notice Ranma muttering
something.  He turned around.


As for the story... all I can say is, Florencio, you're a real card. :-)

He is at that.  He oughtta be decked or dealt with. ^_-

Zen's only comment on this exchange is that 'Vegas Style' *IS* just
dealing one card at a time, but only going through the deck once too.

At least, that's how Zen recalls it...

Gary Kleppe

Zen no Itan-sha
Apprentice to the Angels of the Apocalypse