Jeanne,

I just read the story you posted on the FFML. I think it is 
perhaps the best pure BGC fic(non crossover, nonself insertion)
ever. You wrote just enough of each characters
 personality to give us a hint of what they will become
in the future. I also liked the rotating first person
viewpoints and the flashbacks during the Knight Sabers
first fight. Just one question:In the fic Sylia said that
she 'had to nudge one of them to make her a little more receptive
to her proposal.' Which one?Did she sabatoging Linna's 
tryout or kill Priss's boyfriend?(I know that the general
opinion would be that she sabatoge Linna but killing 
Priss's boyfriend would make Priss somewhat easier
to recruit. Given Priss's attitude I can't see her
joining the KS with her boyfriend still alive)
Please send this
to your writing partner Mr Skuse.
Thanks for listening and keep up the great work!!

-- 

David Lindquist
fido@rma.edu
UNKNOWN=You can either be the master of your future or a slave 
to your past. It's your call."