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From: Scott Schimmel
Scott:  Well, if there was still any question as to
Richard's feelings about Kazuya, they're now laid to
rest... ^_^

Hehehe, true.  I hate the little jerk.  Even the story where he helds
Kyosuke help Madoka wasn't enough to raise my opinion of him.
Contemptuous, a user of people - and with unmatched, unchecked power.
Hence my portrayal of him here.

Well, I wouldn't say "unmatched"... but it is pretty gross.
Grandma and Grandpa are definitely stronger, and Akane may well be
(since it seems to be tied to age).  There are hints that Kyousuke is
abnormally strong, too, but that might just be me looking too far into
things.

Yuu:  Poor Kyousuke is going to end up getting the blame for
everything Kazuya's done, isn't he?

No, but it does play a part in things to come.

Hmmm...

Yuu:  Someone pretty important.

Nah, generic anonymous evil guy.

Really?  I didn't get that impression at all.  Not that it matters.

Akane:  Why is he trying to visualize?  If he can use
his telepathy to get test answers without hurting or
alerting the teacher, why can't he use it to get an
image of what the people outside can see?

Well, he doesn't *know* there are people outside.  He needs to see
someone to control them.  An arbitrary condition of mine.  :)

But he doesn't have to see someone to use telepathy to send or receive
thoughts.  If there's no thoughts to receive, he'd know nobody was
outside.  If there were thoughts, he could read them to see which
position the men were in.

Scott:  Makes for a better story.  Besides, the dreams
aren't consistent.

I didn't use a dream because I hate them.  Whenever a story began with a
dream sequence, I could predict the plot almost to the panel.  Dream seems
to mean one thing, reality something altogether different, hilarious
hijinks result from Kyosuke's misunderstanding.  A much-overused plot
device by MI.

I have to admit, a lot of KOR is repetitious... but I love it anyway.

Yuu:  It almost had to be Madoka's idea.  It would
take Kyousuke years to work up enough courage to
propose.

Hmm.  Interesting thought.  I wonder what that would be like?

I considered a fic about it for a while, but I haven't been able to
come up with a more solid plot.  Besides, I've already got a dozen
other fics barely started. ^_^

Scott:  One of my favorite parts in both the anime and manga.

One of my favorite stories in the manga.  Would love to see the anime
version.

It's pretty similar... nice to see it animated.

"What's wrong, Sis- uh, Akane?"  He had to be careful.

She evidently missed it.

Akane:  It's amazing that she could miss something that
blatant.  No matter how distracted she is, she's used to
watching people's reactions so she can keep manipulating
them with her disguise power.

I was wondering if anyone would catch this.  I wasn't entirely
comfortable with it, either.

I'd just drop the "Sis- uh, Akane" part.  I think it detracts more
than it adds.

Yuu:  Hmm... Kyousuke and Kazuya haven't seen much of
each other for ten years... I don't see how Kazuya
thinks he can pull the impersonation off without using
his power on everyone he meets.  And doing that would
get him noticed by some of the Kasuga clan.

Well, he has just trying to find a way out of getting killed.  He's still
giddy with relief over escaping that fate.  He's due for a reality check.
:)

Heh, true enough.

Scott:  Actually, this might not have the desired
effects.  Sometimes, when Kyousuke is unable to
concentrate, he just can't use his powers, but
sometimes they get scrambled, or go off
involuntarily, or get out of control.  These guys
just might be in for a surprise.

You don't say...

Just... uh... thought I'd remind you!  Yeah, that's the ticket...

Then she was going to leave.

Akane:  I knew Hikaru had to show up.

You did?  Was I that obvious?  Rats.  :)

Well, I suspected it from Madoka's earlier comments.  And it would be
a little strange for her not to show up in a KOR fic this size.

The bride had acted like a love-sick airhead.

Something the woman was all too familiar with.

Akane:  Saved us the trouble of saying it, eh?

Hehehehehe.

Admittedly, the manga Hikaru is better regarding this... but it's an
easy shot.

Akane:  True, but the other people at the ceremony don't have that
excuse.  Why wouldn't Manami notice, or Grandma?  Or even Akane, since
she knows Kazuya better than anyone else?

Well, they notice he's acting odd, but put it down to wedding-day anxiety.
Only Hikaru knows both Madoka and Kyosuke well enough to notice that
they're *both* acting strangely, and that it has to be more than just
jitters.

Okay, I can buy that.

Besides, it's always good to see people writing KOR. ^_^

Now that I've actually read the manga, I can go about and read some of it
myself.  Any recommendations?

Kimagure Orange College is a must.  Especially now that they're
re-releasing the older chapters.  Fugawari Orange Street is
interesting, too, for a different take on older Kazuya.

Unfortunately, those two, plus HardKOR, make up the bulk of KOR fanfic
at this point, and FOS has been on hiatus for a year.

Thanks, guys.  This means a lot to me.  Always love getting C&C of any
kind, of course, but MST's are special.  :)

Glad you liked it.  They're fun (if time-consuming ^_^) to do.


Scott Schimmel                http://www.seas.upenn.edu/~schimmel/
Ex ignorantia ad sapientium;  "You really aren't normal, are you?"
ex luce ad tenebras.              -- Miki Koishikawa