Original fic by: Carlin (sorry, you never gave me the address!

Carlin92@aol.com

Jester Blue: Hiya folks.  Today we're gonna review this here fic.  It's 
a pretty good 'un.

<Basking in the glow of praise> Glad you enjoyed the story. 

M. L:  Mademoiselle Nabiki.
JB:  That was great.  Maybe we should hire her frenchy?
M. L:  Non.  It would be a poor idea.  She would embezzle the money 
I am supposed to appropriate.
JB:  Yeah!  That is a good idea!   Teach both of ya's to be honest.

'Embezzle' is such an ugly word, more like 'Creatively appropriate' :)

sports team had its own table, even the full-contact chess
club.  Along with the typical after school programs, tables

JB:  Full-contact chess?
M. L:  Of course, monsieur.  It is very popular in France.

That is surprisingly unsurprising. :) 

Student-Teacher Ambulance Corps was one of the newest of
Furinkan's many clubs, established only three years ago shortly
after the enrollment of Tendou Akane. They sat apart from the
members of the support group for the victims of involuntary
hair removal (meetings every Tuesday and Friday) To protect
public safety and at the behest of the faculty, the rival fan
clubs, one for Tendou Akane and the other for the mysterious
Pig-tailed Girl, sat at opposite ends of the lunch room.

JB:  This is a pretty active school.  Where did they get these nuts from,
Frank?
M. L:  It is something in the water. 

It's Nerima, need I say more?

	"That is Upperclassmen Kunou to you, Knave!" he said, not
taking his eyes from Saotome.

JB: <flip flip flip> Ahh, I found it.  "Knave, n.  a male child or boy."  
I thought Ukyou was a chick?

Ukyou's a girl but at this point Kunou doesn't know that. 

annoying but I've almost gotten used to it by now. He'll always
blame me for everything that happens. Who cares? Just don't get
involved O.K.? Last thing I want is Kunou starting in on you
too." He concluded, looking Ukyou right in the eye.

M. L: <yawns>  Perhaps, Monsieur Author should cut down on the monologues.
JB:  Whatt'ya talkin' about Frank?  This is good stuff. [munches popcorn]

Thanks JB! Anyway, If you think this is bad, you should
see the early drafts. Wasn't pretty! I'm working on it though
and will, hopefully, improve with practice.

	For his part, Ranma was busy once again cursing his father
for ever engaging him to Akane and bringing them both to
Nerima. 'Oh yeah, when I get home, the first thing I do is beat

M. L:  I don't believe Ranma's father brought Akane to Nerima.

'them both' being Ranma and his father...looks like more editing is 
in order. 

	Seeing Ranma squirm, Nabiki couldn't help but drive the
nail in a little deeper. She walked to Ranma and whispered.
"Well I don't know, Ranma, this is just SO much fun. I mean,
with our Rising Star over here", she beckoned to Kunou. "I can
keep this up for hours." Her face practically glowed with
mischievous joy.

JB:  Man, what a  * mmmf *.
M. L:  That is not a polite word.
JB:  I was gonna say witch...

That's only the side of Nabiki that you see at this point. Keep watching
there's more to her than meets the eye. <Humming the transformers' theme
songs>

gilded words and casual airs, for I know better. On the other

JB:  What's he mean, gelded words?
M. L:  Gilded.  It means silver-coated.  Much like a politician, 
or in your case everything you say.
JB:  Ahh, frenchy, I didn't think you cared.

LOL Gilded! Gelded is a WHOLE other thing! 

	Ranma suddenly got up and pushed the bokken out of his
face. "Coward?!?!?! You are calling ME a COWARD?!? That's it!

JB:  Open up a can a'whoop ass kid!

You know what they say, what goes around, comes around. Kunou
will get his. 

JB:  So what'd ya think, frenchy?
M. L: <snores> Quoi? Q'est que c'est?  Oh, pardon moi.  You were 
saying monsieur?
JB:  Jeez frenchy, I can't take you nowhere.  Well, I guess we'll 
have to watch part 2.  

The fun's just starting...Thanks for the MST <My first, damn I 
feel special (G)> 
                                                                          Carl
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