Subject: Embarrassingly early fanfic 4
From: "Benjamin McCrillis" <akun16@hotmail.com>
Date: 1/18/1998, 12:50 PM
To: akun15@hotmail.com
CC: fanfic@fanfic.com

Part 4.  I'm trying to get the rest of it in here, but I'm not sure if 
it'll fit.  If it doesn't, I'll have to put one more in.  Again, if 
you're missing any of the parts, or you have MSTs or anything like that, 
e-mail me at akun16@hotmail.com.  I'd like to hear from readers.

	"We are all out of soy sauce." Kasumi said.
	"I'll fetch it." Ryoga said.
	Kasumi took off her apron and picked up her shopping basket.
	"Shall we go now, Ryoga?" Kasumi asked.
	"Are you coming too, Kasumi?" Ryoga asked.
	"Yes, I may remember something I've forgotten to get." Kasumi replied.

	Later, behind a large curtain, Nabiki looked out at the crowd.
	"Looks like a full crowd." Nabiki commented.
	Ranko, Shampoo, Akane, and Kasumi looked at themselves once more before 
they nodded to Shin.  The curtain opened to reveal the five women to the 
crowd.  The music began.
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Akane: You never say what you feel.
	  Love can't on with just one.
All the girls: Sing out of my heart.
			 I don't want to feel this loneliness.
			 I want you back in my arms!

All the girls: Darling, just for me can't I wait for you?
Shampoo: In your heart, Shampoo make you feel so brand-new!
All the girls: When you beckon, love comes at your call
			 It's a love that's meant to be
			 It's in the stars above
			 Why not fall in love?

Kasumi: Tonight, isn't it sweet?
	   There by the beach a car, two lovers talking
Nabiki: It's true!  I saw it, too
	   They held each other yet seemed far away
Akane: Invisible barrier
	  Something's come between, you know what I mean?
All the girls: See the tears begin to flow...
			 Fall in love

All the girls: Darling, just for me can't I wait for you?
Ranko: Say the words that make my heart swing on top of the trees
All the girls: This is bigger than the both of us
			 It's a love that's meant to be
			 It's in the stars above
			 Why not fall in love?
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	The crowd cheered.
	"Hello, and welcome to the Tendo family Christmas party.  I hope you 
all have a great time!" Nabiki announced.
	The night seemed to fly by.  Cake was served and eaten. Ukyo and Akane 
tried to feed Ranma-chan.  Ranko shoved a bowl down Kuno's throat after 
he tried to grab her.  Guile, Chun Li and Darth Vader battled M. Bison 
and his lackeys.  Tsubasa pretended to be the christmas tree.  Kasumi 
swiped Azusa's little Jospehine Rose (a giant battle cruiser that Azusa 
took with her) and Azusa bawled until Nodoka shoved a wad of cotton 
balls (filled with sake) in her mouth which she promptly ate and shut 
up.
	Shows of talent entertained the gathered crowd.  Sasuke dancing with 
straws up his nose.  Kuno cutting watermelons at an incredible rate.  
Mousse and Shin-chan performing magic.  Linlin and Ranran performing a 
dance.  Shin making his bo glow like Darth Vader's blade.
	Shin, Ranko, Ranma, Nabiki, Ryoga, Kuno, Sasuke, Shampoo, Mousse, 
Akane, and Kodachi were playing cards with two decks of cards.
	Ryoga drew one card and thought of Akane.
	Kuno drew two cards and thought of Akane, Ranko, Ranma-chan, Ryoga-chan 
and Shin-chan.
	Sasuke drew two cards and thought of...well, I don't know.
	Mousse drew three cards and thought of Shampoo.
	Kodachi drew four cards and thought of Shin, Ranma, Ranko-kun, and 
(surprisingly) Ranma-chan.
	Nabiki drew a card and thought of her profit margin for the year.
	Shampoo drew two cards and thought of Ranma, Ranko and Shin and 
wondered who was who.
	Shin drew a card and thought of Ukyo.
	Ranko drew three cards and wondered what everyone else was thinking.
	Akane drew two cards and thought of Ranma.
	Ranma drew three cards and knew he had nothing.
	"I have one pair." Sasuke said, displaying his cards.
	"Two pair." Kuno said.
	"I have two pair as well." Ryoga said.
	Nabiki and Kodachi sighed as they too had two pair.
	"I have three of a kind." Ukyo said.
	"Full house." Mousse said.
	"Junk." Ranma and Ranko said in unison.
	"Three of a kind." Akane said.
	"I four kind." Shampoo said.
	"Ha.  Royal straight flush." someone said.
	They turned to the Gambling King.
	"You all lose." He told them.
	"Nope.  Five Aces." Shin said, diplaying his cards.
	Everyone turned to him.
	"We ARE playing two decks." Shin told them.
	Everyone groaned.

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-"Anything that explodes, bulges first"- A-chan with an even more 
perverted thought. 
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	"Now, as the invitation said, it's time to exchange presents.  Ready?  
Now, let's..." Nabiki began.
	"Hold everything." Soun in a bad Santa Claus suit interupted.
	Genma in a bad reindeer costume walked out onto the stage carrying 
Soun/Santa.
	"Ha ha ha.  My name is Santa Claus and I've just arrived from the north 
pole to bring gifts to good little boys and girls." Soun/Santa 
announced.
	"If he says his arms are tired, I'll hurt him." Shin told Ukyo.
	Ukyo giggled at the joke.  Nodoka thought of all the nasty things she 
was going to do to Genma when this was over.
	"And the names of those two little children are..." Soun/Santa began.
	"Ranma Saotome and Akane Tendo." Genma said.
	Sweat drops appeared behind everyone's head.
	"Come forward and accept your gifts, little ones." Soun/Santa said.
	[Santa's present is meant to last a lifetime.  It's an engagement ring 
for Ranma to give to Akane.] Soun/Santa thought.
	[Ranma, my boy, with this many witnesses, you put the ring on her 
finger and there's no turning back.  Trust me, son, father knows best.] 
Genma thought.
	Happosai began bouncing around the room with his sack filled.  Shin 
immediately snatched the bag off Happosai's back and ki-blasted the old 
man out of the FanFic.  A runaway horse smashed through a wall and 
stopped in front of Akane.  A young man and a young woman were on the 
horse's back.
	"Merry Christmas to you, Akane Tendo, thanks for inviting me.  Look 
what I've got.  It's a very special gift." the young man on the horse's 
back said.  (Sorry, I can't recall their names.)
	The box shook, then burst open to reveal an old woman.
	"Are we there, yet?" the old woman asked.
	"Aaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!" the boy cried.
	"Thought you'd run off and leave your poor granny behind?  I'm wise to 
your tricks.  When we get back, I'll make you dance to the sound of my 
hickery stick!" the old woman told him.
	"I was bad, please forgive me." the boy pleaded.
	"Shampoo?  Shampoo, where are you?  Shampoo?" Mousse called.
	Akane looked around.
	[Ranma's gone and so is Ukyo.  Oh, no!  They wouldn't!] Akane thought, 
racing outside, past Ryoga, who was about to say something.
	Ryoga's hopes crashed.  Shin watched Akane race out and looked around.  
He walked over to Ryoga.
	"Hey, don't give up.  She's just occupied.  She probably just forgot 
your gift inside." Shin told him.
	"You think so?" Ryoga asked.
	"Most likely." Shin replied.
	Shin walked outside, knowing it was a lie.

	"Now, just stay right here or I'll tell everyone you had to borrow 
money from me to buy Akane's present!" Nabiki told Ranma.
	"But that's not fair, Nabiki!" Ranma replied.
	"Life seldom is, Ranma." Nabiki said, climbing down the ladder.
	Later, Ukyo showed up.
	"Ranchan." Ukyo said.
	"Ukyo?" Ranma asked.
	Ukyo sat down next to him.
	"I can't believe we're finally alone." Ukyo commented.
	Ukyo noticed the gift at Ranma's side.
	"Is that a present for me?  Oh, I'm so happy you thought of me." Ukyo 
said, smiling.
	"Actually, this for..." Ranma began.
	[Don't back down now, girl.] Ukyo thought.
	Shin saw Ukyo next to Ranma.  With that, his heart shattered.  He 
turned and walked inside.
	"Stop right there." Shampoo said.
	"I see the mice have been at play while Kodachi was away." Kodachi 
said.
	"Hey, this is my time with Ranma, get in line!" Ukyo said.
	"That present for Shampoo you no take from Ranma." Shampoo said, 
brandishing her bonbori.
	"People, people, no need to fight.  There's plenty to go around." 
Nabiki said.
	"Aw, man.  I'm outta here!" Ranma said, as he raced away.
	"Ranma!" the three girls cried as they followed.
	"Well, there goes the business.  At least I got paid." Nabiki said to 
herself.
	Akane climbed onto the roof and saw the three girls chasing Ranma.  
Ranma noticed Akane was in his path and in the line of fire.
	"Get your fanny back here!" Ukyo yelled, throwing her mini spatulas.
	"Ranma no go!" Shampoo cried throwing her bonbori.
	"Ranma darling!" Kodachi said, snapping her ribbon at Ranma.
	"Akane, get out of the way!" Ranma said, picking up Akane.
	The attacks never even came close to the two as they were blocked by a 
ki-barrier.  Shin-chan landed as Ranma and Akane crashed into a hole in 
the roof.
	"I can't let you follow them." Shin-chan told them, evenly.
	"Get out of Shampoo's wa-" Shampoo was cut short as she was sent flying 
back to the Nekohaten.
	"Insolent-" Kodachi was also cut off as she flew back to the Kuno 
Mansion.
	Ukyo stood dumbfounded.
	"Well?" Shin-chan asked.
	"Why are you doing this?" Ukyo asked.
	"Why are you still chasing Ranma?" Shin-chan asked.
	Ukyo looked at Shin-chan.  Shin-chan tossed her a present and left 
without a word, though a stream of tears was visible.  Ukyo looked at 
the gift and slowly opened it.
	A tiny velvet box was inside and inside of that was a beautiful ornate 
ring with a oriental dragon as the gold band and between it's claws and 
it's tail was a diamond.  
	The note that was with the ring read, "Ukyo, I'm way too shy to ask you 
this in person, but will you marry me someday?  Shin."
	Ukyo finished reading the note and burst into tears, holding the ring 
close to her, refusing to believe that she had been so inconsiderate to 
realize she had slipped back to her old habits of chasing Ranma.  
Shin-chan sat in the park crying as well.

	Ranma and Akane sat up from their awkward position.
	"Are you still mad?" Ranma asked.
	"Nope." Akane said.
	"Yes, you are." Ranma replied.
	"Here." Akane said, holding out a bag to Ranma.
	"What's this?" Ranma asked.
	"It's sort of a christmas present." Akane replied.
	Ranma opened it to reveal a yellow scarf.
	"Hey, this really nice.  Has Ranko been helping you?" Ranma asked.
	"No.  I made it myself." Akane replied.
	Ranma smiled and put it on.
	[I perfer red, but hey, it's the thought that counts.] Ranma thought.
	"Uh, here." Ranma said, holding out a box to Akane.
	Akane opened it.
	"It's a picture frame.  That's the best photo I could find." Ranma 
said.
	The clear frame held a picture of Ranma, Ranko, Shin, Ukyo, Akane and 
Ryoga all jokingly flexing like body builders.
	"And you picked this one." Akane said, hugging the picture and frame.
	"Akane." Ranma said, putting his hands on her shoulders.
	Suddenly the wood beneath them creaked and broke sending the couple to 
the party below.
	"Ranma, how dare you!" Ryoga said.
	"To touch Akane Tendo in that manner..." Kuno said.
	"I'll just put this on your tab." Nabiki said, clicking off the lights.

	Ukyo was frantically searching all the places she thought Shin might 
have been.  Finally, she came to the park.  She saw Shin-chan curled up 
into a ball on a park bench.
	"Shin?" Ukyo asked.
	Shin-chan gave no indication of a response or acknowledgement.  Ukyo 
sat down next to her.
	"I'm....sorry.  I didn't think you cared about me like that.  
I...should have realized it earlier...but, I....." Ukyo let the sentence 
trail off.
	"But, you still love Ranma.  I should have known.  What could I ever be 
to you, other than a friend who's always there?  I have about as much 
chance to get your heart as Ryoga has to get Akane's." Shin-chan said.
	"Ryoga still could..." Ukyo began.
	"Hardly.  She's given her heart to Ranma, like you have.  Goodbye, 
Ukyo." Shin-chan said, abruptly standing up and starting to walk away.
	"Shin...wait." Ukyo said, walking up next to her.
	Shin-chan stopped.
	"I do like you....isn't that a start?" Ukyo asked.
	"Like and love aren't the same.  Can you love me?" Shin-chan asked.
	[I....don't know.  If I say yes, I feel like I'll love him because he 
looks like Ranchan.  If I say no....I feel like I'll lose everything 
that's important to me.] Ukyo thought.
	Shin-chan watched Ukyo's eyes.  Mixed emotions flowed through them.
	[She cares about me, but is it love?] Shin-chan wondered.
	Shin-chan pulled out a thermos and changed back.  Shin looked Ukyo 
square in the eye.
	[He's like Ranchan, but he's different in a lot of things.  He makes me 
feel.....special.  Like I'm the only light in his universe.  His only 
reason to live.  But, do I love him?] Ukyo wondered.
	A tiny voice replied, [Yes.]
	She grabbed Shin and kissed him.  Shin's shattered heart reformed 
stronger than ever.  He pulled her close to him and dreamed of a day 
that the kiss would never end.
	They broke the kiss and Ukyo pulled out the ring that Shin had given 
her.  She put it on.
	"This won't official until our parents approve, you know." Ukyo said.
	"I know, but I don't care." Shin replied.

	Later that night, Kasumi and Ranko sat cleaning the mess left by the 
party.  Kasumi lifted a small unopened present.  It opened by itself and 
revealed a sparkling of light which disapated.
	"Kasumi, Ranko, come here quickly." Nodoka said.
	"What is it?" Ranko asked.
	"Come on or you'll miss this." Nodoka said, motioning them.
	They walked outside and onto the patio.  They looked into the sky and 
saw the beautiful lights streaking down from the sky.  Dr. Tofu, Shin, 
Ukyo, Akane, Ryoga, Benjamin, Nabiki, Genma, and Soun were already 
watching.
	Genma put his arm around Nodoka.  Ranma hugged Akane close.  Dr. Tofu 
stood next to Kasumi.  Benjamin and Nabiki stood close together.  Ryoga 
and Ranko blushed as they looked at each other and stood closer to each 
other.
	Shin hugged his new fiancee close as they watched the sky.  They were 
in an embrace that neither of them wanted to break.  They smiled at each 
other and kissed before returning their attention to the sky.

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-"We humans can only strive to be the best we can be, that is the best 
we can ever be or do.  Even if someone thinks it's not enough, it is.  
But, in our unrealistic quest for perfection, we must not forget what is 
more important..." A-kun
"A-kun, shut up and take off your boxers." A-chan
"Last time I ever play strip poker with teams.  How come you get to be 
with Loki and I'm with Bacchus?" A-kun-
============================================================

	New year's eve, 11:59:00 pm...
	"I hear it's an american custom to kiss the one you love most at 
midnight." Shin said.
	11:59:15 pm...
	"Really?  That's sounds intresting." Ranko said.
	The gathered group in the Tendo living room consisted of Ranma, Akane, 
Shin, Ukyo, Ranko, Ryoga, Kasumi, Dr. Tofu (who, for once wasn't going 
crazy), Nodoka, Genma, Nabiki, and Benjamin Kilok.
	They had already finished the New year's eve preparations and were 
awaiting midnight.  Soun had already gone to bed, having stayed up the 
previous night for some unknown reason.
	Benjamin had managed to send Happosai back to 4,000,000 B.C. using a 
reversed version of his earlier machine.  Unfortunately for Happosai, 
(I'm assuming this.) Mt. Fuji was still active at the time and Benjamin 
just happened to send him right above it.
	Regardless, they all agreed to invite Benjamin over.  Nabiki seemed to 
be intrested in Benjamin's altered time machine, but was disappointed 
when Benjamin told her he had accidently blown up another lab doing the 
Happosai experiment.  (Not really, but it was better than causing 
possible time loops.)
	11:59:30 pm...
	"I think I may have found a way to keep my lab from being destroyed 
each time." Benjamin said cheerfully.
	11:59:45 pm...
	"How's that?" Ukyo asked, scooting closer to Shin.
	Akane moved closer to Ranma, Ranko moved closer to Ryoga, Nabiki moved 
closer to Benjamin, Nodoka moved closer to Genma and Kasumi moved closer 
to Dr. Tofu.
	"Move my lab away from the machine and make sure no forest fires can 
start." Benjamin replied.
	11:59:55 pm...
	"Doctor?" Nabiki asked.
	"What?" Benjamin asked.
	12:00:00 am...
	Akane kissed Ranma.  Shin and Ukyo kissed.  Ranko tackled Ryoga and 
kissed him.  Nodoka surprised Genma by kissing him.  Kasumi kissed Dr. 
Tofu.  Nabiki kissed Benjamin.
	12:30:00 am...
	The couples were still kissing.
	1:00:00 am...
	The couples were still kissing.
	9:00:00 am...
	The couples stopped kissing, smiled at their partner and resumed 
kissing.

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Ending theme song - "Let's Keep It Friends For Now (Platonic)"
A-kun's attribute

Here's the scene - an empty, romantic beach
You and I are all alone
Playful times as we ran holding hands
It all goes still.

Look that's in your eyes - it somehow scares me
What is there for us to fear?
In the skies...In the seas...In the waves
So far away.

Ah! Don't think I can stand this feeling
Just the touch of your hand.
Can't you see I still need some time
Till I'm ready again?

As you brush the sand away from my lips
Touch me so tenderly
We're so close I can see myself in your eyes
Just where I want to be!

(Platonic) Let's keep it friends -
Let's keep it friends for now
Come on, promise me.

(Platonic) Let's keep it friends -
Let's keep it friends for now
Even though I love you!
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	Aw, $&*t!  I had to end the story.  I hope you found the ending as 
sickening as I did.  I thought of ripping the story apart like so many 
of my others, but this story held.  I wanted to introduce an arch-rival 
or something, but it turned out I didn't need to or I couldn't keep the 
story together if I did.
	If you still haven't figured it out, I thought "what if Ranma had a 
brother and a sister from a different dimension."
	The story started AFTER the second movie if you didn't catch that.  I 
thought of doing the Desperately Seeking Shampoo plot, the reversal 
jewel was so tempting, but I realized that Shampoo might kill me, Shin 
and Ranko for coming up with what I had in mind.  Besides, with Shin 
around, Cologne's plan wouldn't have worked, Shin's too clever.
	I thought of actually bringing in Lord Zedd and Queen Beryl, most 
likely a tag-team or something like that, but when I read that Chris 
Schroder had already beaten me to the idea, I decided to let him keep 
the idea.
	I have thought of sequels.  If you thought I was just going to let 
something like this slide without at least a follow up or a variant, 
dream on!  Shin and Ranko have a lot of promise and you just have to 
wonder, where did the photo that Ranma gave to Akane come from and where 
did Shin get the ring?  More is on the way!
	I have a few other projects, and if you have a story idea that you 
don't think will work, send it to me.  I just love finding a way to get 
stories to work.  If you like, I'll even write it and send you a copy.  
If you have comments or questions, please send them to me and try to be 
as specific as possible.
	Please, no "It sucked!" or "That one part really pissed me off!".  
Please tell me why it sucked or why that part really pissed you off.  It 
will help me become a better author and in the long run, it will keep 
you from being pissed off.
	I might try a serious version of this if you perfer those.  I might 
have a weirdier version or a funnier version.
	I'm definitely going to write a few side stories to this.
	By the way, this doesn't mean Akane and Ranma are getting married or 
even making the engagement official, who knows, maybe Ryoga will wind up 
with Akane.  The whole point of introducing Shin and Ranko was to add 
some unusual aid.
	And I'm still not sure Ben finished off Happosai, even though death was 
unavoidable.  Happosai has shown that he can with stand fatal injuries 
before.
	This story was finished as of 8-8-96.

Profiles
--------
(Sorry, I don't give exact measurements on height, but I don't really 
know anyone's height save my own creation, Benjamin Kilok.)

Shin Saotome  Age:16  Eyes:Grey (boy)/ Blue (girl)  Hair:Black (male)/ 
Red (female)
Height: same as Ranma's/ same as Nodoka
Gender: Boy (original form)/ Girl (cursed form)
Martial Arts status: Master of Anything Goes School of Martial Arts
Combat skills: RO (Ridiculously Overpowered)

	Shin has the most normal life of the trio as he has somehow mastered 
Kasumi's ability to not only stop conflicts (sometimes), but to aviod 
making enemies.  Let's face it, we can't stay mad at Kasumi.


Ranko Saotome  Age:16  Eyes:Blue (girl)/ Grey (boy)
Hair: Red (female)/ Black (male)
Gender: Girl (original form)/ Boy (cursed form)
Height: an inch taller than Ranma-chan/ equal Ranma
Martial Arts status: Ranma's equal
Combat skills: Equal to Ranma

	Ranko has had the most traumatic life of the trio, having lost both her 
mother and her father (figuratively).  I thought about swaping Shin and 
Ranko's lives, but that might be sexist, so I decided that Ranko should 
be hardened to the point of being equal to Ryoga.


Benjamin Kilok  Age:22  Eyes: Blue
Hair: Brownish-black
Gender: Male
Height: 5'11"
Martial Arts status: Unknown
Combat skills: Unknown

	Ben is the quirky scientist that brought Ranko and Shin to Ranma's 
dimension.  He and Nabiki have been dating for the three months that the 
trio, Ryoga, Ukyo and Akane were gone.  What happened to his assistant 
and the business man?  Who knows, who cares!


Other stories that may or may not reach the internet:

The Christmas Kiss
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The plot?  Re-read the title.  It's done, I just have to post it.

Roku-bun No San: MMMR
---------------------
I'm not telling.

Roku-bun No San: Version 2
--------------------------
That's right!  Another version of this story!

Roku-bun No San: Version 3
--------------------------
That's right!  Yet another version of this story!

Roku-bun No San 2
-----------------
I won't tattle, but it might not have a continous plot.

Roku-bun No San: A Lemon
------------------------
As a wise man once said, "See one porn movie and you've seen them all, 
but lemons are always different.".  I must warn that I'm new to the 
lemon writing business, but I intend to have, yes, A PLOT!!!  
Da-da-da-dum!!!!!!

Roku-bun No San: A Lemon 2
--------------------------
No, not a typo, and not a mistake.  I have two lemon ideas in my head!!  
Da-da-da-dum!  Da-da-da-dum!!

Walker
------
A young man, NOT ME, has entered the Ranma 1/2 universe.  But, where is 
he from?  (I might change the title)

Yohko: A Jack Of All Trades
---------------------------
It introduces another devil hunter, Jack Hyde.  Now, what could THIS 
possibly mean?

Author's Paradise
-----------------
A little look into what it takes to be an author and the rigors of 
becoming author material and a little look into what goes on behind your 
favorite Manga and Anime.

A-kun, signing off, cause I haven't slept in a week and I REALLY gotta 
go.
sed you off.

(Hey, this WAS the last part!  YAAAAAAAAAAAAAYY!!!)

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