I thought this was a nicely written story, with good balanced
characterization of Ranma and Akane. I only spotted one typo:

the food on the table.  Kasumi began clearing a few dishes.  No one was
paying any attention to hear.

BUT...

I really can't buy the ending. It's not believable to me that Nabzy
would be that cruel to Ranma -- especially when she's not making any
profit off it. This just seems a bit sadistic for her.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics