In response to 'the RAMS', i don't get what you mean by Chapter 2 
flowing on from the unrevised Chapter 2. I havn't posted any unrevised 
chapter 2's. I only posted Chapter's 1 and 2 AFTER revision. (Unless you 
made a mistake and thought that Chapter 1 was the unrevised Chapter 2)

With the lemon scene and Ranma leaving Shampoo after it, hmm I 
considered the question of honor but for the sake of the story flowing, 
i couldn't think of any other way to do it. Coz what happens later is 
that though Ranma did leave Shampoo, he's been getting nagging thoughts 
from his conscience about that fact that Shampoo was now his etc etc. 
For the sake of his health though (if Akane finds out), he's been trying 
to hide it. Then Shampoo shows up later during a time when Ranma and 
Akane have one of their intimate moments and lowers the boom.

>From there, a lot can happen, the obvious is that Akane gets REALLY mad 
and breaks the engagement(well maybe not to that extent -suggestions plz 
;). Regarding a question of honor, his mother would prolly offer him 2 
choices, 1) redeem his honor and marry Shampoo, therefore breaking the 
engagement with Akane and most prolly getting him and the rest of his 
family kicked out of the Tendo household or 2) commit seppuku as a 
disgraced warrior.

All this (depending on how i decide to write it and feedback) will take 
place in Chapter 4. Chapter 3 basically sees Ranma getting reunited with 
his mother, another intimate scene with Akane and Ran-ko gets attacked 
by one of the shadow creatures. As well as Ranma's conscience beginning 
to nag at him.Chapter 4: Days of Thunder, Nights of Pain basically 
begins with the invitations to the tournament being sent out and Ranma 
making the decision on whether to marry Shampoo and leave Akane or die.

Feedback on the above will be appreciated :) Btw, i'll say now that in 
the tournament later (or rather after the FORMAL fights) one of the 
characters gets killed. I am debating on who, atm i am leaning toward 
Ran-ko as Ranma is forced to kill her in the 'Mangetsu no Jusenkyo' 
state.





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