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From: OneShot <jeffwong@li.net>
To: fanfic@fanfic.com
Subject: [FFML] [EVA][Fanfic]Annoyed
Date: Monday, December 29, 1997 6:32 AM

Jeffrey "OneShot" Wong

Neo Genesis Evangelion: Annoyed 

I believe you mean "Neon."  <grin>

I don’t know why I wrote this. I just did. I’m pretty sure people are

gonna

flame me bigtime for what I had Asuka go through. It’s just that I

noticed she

really acts mean toward Shinji so I figured he should get some fun also.

I’m

sorry if there are any character inconsistencies; I only saw a few

episodes of

EVA. Heck, I know VERY LITTLE about Neo Genesis Evangelion. No need to

send

comments.

Overall, not too bad.  Characterization ain't half bad for someone who
doesn't know the series all that well---Shinji's transitions from meek and
sulky to berserker rage are done pretty well, though I can't help but feel
you're a -bit- off for Shinji by the time of the 13th Angel...

Oh, and one other fairly major point: Eva-01 does -not- kill Touji; he's
maimed and I believe it's stated somewhere that he loses his left leg, but
after some time in the Central Dogma hospital, he's well off the critical
list.


But overall, as I said, not bad.

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