Ranma and Akane have sex on Akane's bed.

THE END

Sorry to quote the whole story, but I really needed to, to give C&C on it.

Well, the spelling's okay, and the grammar is okay, so there's no real
problem there.

But the whole thing lacks characterisation and, well, fankly it's boring.
I'd say that going back to the drawing board and using a little
imagination would do the trick. And try for more details. And a story
line. Having a story line would keep the reader's attention. Having
details will keep the perverts' attention.

Better luck next time!

^_^

(PS - Merry Christmas to everyone!)

Kun-chan...
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