bogue@oak.negia.net wrote:

Ryoucilo
Bogue@negia.net

Ranma and Akane have sex on Akane's bed.

THE END

Bravo!  Bravo!  Well done!  Not as good as "C-ko Vs. Godzilla" but a
definate contender for shortest fic of the year.

I noticed how Akane seemed to react to Ranma's impulses a little too
quickly, as if she simply performed the deed without thinking it through
carefully.  This makes Akane slightly OCC but I think it works okay for
this fic.  

Likewise, Ranma seems to be slightly agressive in his conquest of Akane,
chosing to seduce her in her bed rather than carry her to his but again
the minor character flaw can be excused because it fits the overall mood
of the piece.  

I look forward to the sequel of this.  Perhaps something a bit more
daring such as "Nabiki and Ranma-Chan seduce Mousse" or even "The Tendo
Sisters seduce Ryouga"  Either way, a good job all around.  :)

Sincerely,

Megane 6.7