At 11:32 PM -0600 12/19/97, mistercb@ix.netcom.com wrote:
This is my first attempt at a fanfic so forgive my
errors. Comments and reviews welcome, but
flames will be tossed out.
for a first fic...it's got some real potential
All characters and situations are copyright their
respective owners; please don't sue me, I'm
broke, okay?
That being said....
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Rage Across Tokyo-3
An Evangelion X-Over Fic
By Christopher Brown
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NOTE: This takes place during ep. 12 of the
TV series.
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<<snip self-exploration scene>>
There is the Shinji that Misato sees, the Shinji
that Ritsuko sees, the Shinji that Askua sees, the
Shinji that Rei sees, the Shinji that Gendou sees;
they are all valid versions of us.
"Asuka"
I'm afraid I will be hated.
You're afraid to be hurt.
You may want to make a more distinct separation between Shinji-self
and and the voice in Shinji's mind ^_^
Why?
Because Father abandonded us for no reason.
No! He left because I did something! It's my
fault!
Is it? What could a three-year old do to make
his father leave him.....You can't answer that, can
you?
Please..leave me alone to die.
I can't.
Why?
Because the Shinji that everyone sees
will change soon.
What do you mean by that?
There is a part of you that wants to break
free. He will not let us die.
What part?
I do not know him; I can only feel him,
that he has been here since our birth. He
will not be denied from existence.
Denied existence?
I must leave; he is approaching.
No, wait!.........
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Shinji then found himself back in the entry
plug. The LCL was cold, and the amount of
debris had increased. He felt death approach,
but then he felt another presence...no, a feeling,
inside of him.
[Shinji.]
"Please, no.." he cried weakly.
[I will not be denied any longer.]
"Please, go away, let me die."
[No, I will not let us die, it is not our time
to die.]
"No..."
[Father must pay for what he has done to
us; he is corrupt, and we must end his
machinations.]
"No..."
[Stop living a lie! you know what I say is
true!]
"Stop..."
[You don't remember when the EVA first
went crazy, do you? That event woke me;
now we will become what we truly are, and
were always ment to be.]
hmm....
"meant"
and his garou side seems awfully lucid for a creature of rage
"I don't want to...."
[Rage, Shinji.]
"No..."
[Rage...]
"Please..."
[Rage!]
"Stop..."
[RAGE!]
"NOOOOO!"
And Shinji Ikari's world went black.
red, maybe? vision covered in blood?thoughts of tearing his
enemies limb from limb?
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"T-minus 60 seconds and counting; all 992
N-2 devices readied for detonation, EVA-00
and EVA-02 are in position," Maya announced.
"Very well, we will commence the operation
on my mark." Ritsuko replied.
Misato Katsugari could only look on in
sadness and hoplessness; her lack of disipline
with Shinji had landed him in this situation, and
she now faced the very real likelihood that one
of the few people that she actually cared about
in this world would die. For the first time in her
life, she felt a sense of complete, utter, total
helplessness.
"Katsuragi"
"What the?....." Askua suddenly yelled in
a mix of surprise horror. A crack had just
formed in the shadow that compromised the
Angel's true "body," and lengthened until it
had crossed the whole diameter of the circle.
"Meters are going off the scale! EVA-01
is apparently fighting it's way.....Oh...my...God!"
Maya gasped in horror. The illusory "body"
of the Angel abruptly changed from its normal
zebra-stripe pattern to pure black. As quickly
as that happened, an arm punched its way out,
then withdrew back into the sphere, blood
spewing rapidly from the inflicted wound.
The small hole then violently ripped apart,
revealing a blood-drenched EVA-01.
That was not the part that stood out, though.
What stood out was the glow to EVA-01's
eyes; eerie, primal, almost inhuman.
"God help us all," Ritsuko muttered to
herself, as she witnessed the visage of gore,
with the blazing eyes standing out. She was
so entranced by the vision that she did not
notice that many of the techs were running away
in sheer terror, while some curled up fetally,
whimpering at the sight of the machine before
them.
"THAT'S what I'm piloting?" Askua cried
in horror. As she saw the visage, she could not
help but look at the eyes; although they terrified
her, she felt a faint feeling as she looked; one
of...for lack of a better word, kinship.
And deep within Askua Langley, something
stirred.
EVA-01 leaped from the Angel's decaying
body, and landed on the remains of the shadow,
now solid as the ground beneath, shattering it.
Rising from it's kneeling position, it raised one
arm, crushed a remnant of the Angel's body in its
hand, raised it's head, and roared....no, howled a
cry of victory. Then, depleted of power, EVA-01
fell forward and shut down, the glow in it's eyes
fading, then vanishing.
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Shinji slowly came into consciousness,
feeling the LCL being evacuated from the entry
plug; it was still dark, and he was very much
disoriented. He coughed the remaider of LCL
>from his lungs and as he slowly opened his eyes,
He saw a figure before him, female and
ethereal. In awe, Shinji spoke one word...
"Mother?"
"Shinji!" a familiar voice cried.
The blinding lights suddenly replaced the
phantom woman with another female visage:
Misato's.
"Oh God! Shinji, I though we lost you!"
Misato cried as she tightly embraced the
Third Child, her tears streaming from her cheeks
onto his chest. The embrace continued for a
minute or so until she heard a voice behind her.
"Misato..." It was Askua's, filled with awe
and fear at the same time.
"What?" Misato replied.
"Look..." Askua pointed towards them;
Misato looked around her then realized what
she was awestruck by.
The inside of the entry plug was demolished.
The walls were inunduated with cracks that
resembled a fist striking a mirror with
extreme force. Even the two butterfly handles
that compromised the EVA's primary controls
were destroyed, as if they were crushed. But
there was one thing that shocked Misato.
"inundated" is a word most commonly used with water, or watery
substances
It was Shinji's plug suit.
The memory plastics that allowed the suit
to expand and contract with the wearer's
figure were ripped away from Shinji's shoulder
to his hands, as well as from his mid-thigh to
his feet, as if their threshold was far exceeded.
Misato could only stare, speechless.
Shinji, exhausted, fell asleep in Misato's arms.
hmmm....possibly "...fell unconscious again..."
All-in-all, a very nice start. You may want to expand out some of the
sequences in shinji's mind a bit (visions of the destruction of nature, of
the earth mother raging for vengeance, of N2 bombs going off in wooded
countryside, etc, etc)
Otherwise, as I said, a very nice start
K-
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"The one who cannot see is far better off than the one who WILL not"