Sorry for replying to this sooner. But I've been a little busy.

In a message dated 97-12-14 15:41:43 EST, you write:

 >It still feels too contrived for the Goddesses to lead Asuka to them. Better
to >have her follow a clue to Nekomi instead.

   That's why I had him lose the card. Besides the goddesses arn't going to be
as much help as you might think they'll be, you'll see. 
 

I'm no expert at this, how much do you guys think Nabs should have charged
for this info?

 
   I think I agree with my first price of 15000 yen.

 >>Suddenly Asuka felt her body loose energy as if it was being drained.
 
 >Much better. Very good.
 
     Thank you.

"WHAT DO YOU THINK YOUR DOING MISS SORYU!? HAND ME THAT KNIFE >>THIS

INSTANT!!!"

Hinako wouldn't ask, she'd just take it out of Asuka's hand, who would be
too weak to resist by this time.

 
I think your right, but I don't know if I'll be doing another revision soon.

All in all better than the 1st version.

 
Thanks a lot for the C&C that help me come up with this version!

James
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