For those interested, It's going to be a bit longer than I imagined
before I post a revised part 1 and 2 of  'A Druid's Way'. The reason for
this is simple, it needs a LOT of work. I've wandered into a trap that
most self insert authors seem to wander into with their characters,
overkill.

    Specifically my character does things he should need help with, and
it's too focused on him. I know this is a little vague but it's hard to
quantify. Lack of development of other characters in another irritant.

    I had noticed lately that I DIDN'T LIKE MY OWN STORY! How's that for
pathetic? The afore mentioned points are a major cause of my discontent.
So I'm making some major revisions. Some sections will be removed,
changed, or enhanced, as well as adding thoughts and dialogue from the
other characters. This will make it a better story, I hope.

   If anyone would be kind enough to send suggestions as to what you
think I should improve/change I would greatly appreciate it. I also need
a new name for the story, 'A Druid's Way' really doesn't get across what
I mean. It's meant to mean a path one wanders, but I don't think the
current title is right for it. Any suggestions on that would be
appreciated as well. I  won't guarantee I'll use it, but I will consider
all but flames for the sake of pain.

   Thanks for taking the time to read this,

Bree


P.S. If you want a current working copy of the story let me know. Be
warned however, it's pretty choppy as I've put things in, but not
necessarily taken anything out or really fitted it with the rest of the
story yet.

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Bree Duffy
bree.duffy@bbs.chemek.cc.or.us
Druid
druid@bbs.chemek.cc.or.us