Subject: Re: [FFML] [FFML] [fic] [Ranma] Mobile Delivery System
From: Steven Scougall
Date: 12/10/1997, 10:29 PM
To: James Champagne , fanfic@fanfic.com

James Champagne wrote:

Okay. This is (everyone join in, now) MY FIRST ATTEMPT AT
FANFICTION. Just a random thought on a slow morning. So
please be kind.

Comments, good or bad, are welcome.

Very good and the conclusion (with the arrival of Shampoo) was
absolutely hilarious.  I especially like the way you tie it more to
Ranma 1/2 with the mention of Ucchan's at the end.

I was expecting something like the ending, with a Ranma character
breaking in, but to be honest I wasn't sure how a Ranma character would
be brought into things, and I was expecting a lost Ryouga instead of
Shampoo...

And the writing was very nice, too.

Well done.