Nihao!

Ho Hung How!  (did that transliterate properly?)

I just wanted to see that I like the concept that you're testing.  
Although this story formula has been done in different ways, it is
always interesting.  It seems a bit hurried and is a little confusing
at points as it is, however, expanding the story should eliminate 
these problems as you would have more room in which to work.  I would
like to see an expanded version of this story soon.

Yeah, so would I... but not from me, mind you.  I've got a full dance card!
(I haven't been confusing in a while now... I seem to be reverting to my
old-style writing... ah, the good ol' days...)

Best of the Season,
Keiichi  <aka Thurston Sherman>

Thanks!

Switch
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