On Mon, 24 Nov 1997, H. Torrance Griffin wrote:

	A few nits....

	First off, it takes a day or three for the fertilized ovum to
properly imbed itself to the uterine wall, so the 'ahah, you're preggers'
but rang most false.

You'll note that while a scientific test to see if she preggers may not
work, but Cologne would be able tell that an egg has been fertilized. 
(Akane's first time was about 30 hours before Cologne saw her.)
 

	Secondly, I think it would be a pretty danged difficult to pound
reality into Tatewaki's head (the only way of explaining the circumstances
of the Curse to him that I think he'd comprehend is not that easy to
arrainge on short notice).  As for Ko-chan, I remain leery of saddling her
with the likes of Mikado, but that is largely my bias.

Nabiki may have been planning to do this for a while and had a plan to
convince Kuno. Chapter 3 also has a scene where Kuno checks the validity
of what Nabiki told him.

Kodachi may not end up with him, that was just a plot point to remove her
as a suitor. I did not really consider a means of removing her as a suitor
when I started this fic.


 > 	Thirdly, why oh why oh _WHY_ must you insist on sadding Shampoo

with Mousse!?!  It would be more forgivable if he grew up and they
developed thier relationship after some time, but _Cologne_ of all people
facilitating his efforts to force her to marry him is enough to make me
scream (ICYHN, I have yet to see why Mousse deserves more consideration
than Kuno or Tsubasa). 

Mousse may not end up with Shampoo. This is just a starting point to a
long running plot line that may take years to finish. He may not end up
with Shampoo because she lost to someone else before he could beat her or
he decided someone else was more worthy of his love. He might win and
Shampoo could still reject him as Ranma rejected her.

As for Cologne, she is more concerned with returning to the Amazon village
with as much honor intact as possible than wether Shampoo will be happy
with Mousse. She would not object to someone else marrying Shampoo. (She
practically suggests to Pantyhose to do that in Chapter 4.)

 

	Fourth, Akane was _way_ to calm about the entire P-Chan thing ^_-

She had about two days of knowing about his water problem before speaking
with him. She was also distracted by other things (getting married, being
pregnant) to really consider what him being P-Chan means (seeing her
naked, held in her bussom, ect...) Her temper is also short term in
nature. Already knowing about the curse saved him from getting his beating
then, but if he does anything to upset her- She may not stop at just one
punch.

 

HTG

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