From:          Chan Wei Lik <weimin@pl.jaring.my>
Reply-to:      "weimin@pl.jaring.my" <weimin@pl.jaring.my>
To:            "'FFML'" <fanfic@fanfic.com>
Subject:       Re: [FFML] (draft)[AMG!/Hellblazer] Dire Fates - pt 1
Date:          Fri, 21 Nov 1997 00:16:16 +0800

I love to see how this one pans out. But could you not put the Japanese 
dialog in <> brackets please? It makes it seem like they're thinking, not 
talking.
Second, contrary to popular opinion, Peorth's domain is NOT forever. The 
closest possibility is mystery.

What should the <> be instead? {}?

Maybe [.........] rather than <........> though I don't have any real problems with you using 
<........>.

I'll have to rethink the "forever" line.

How would this be?

Peorth stood up, pouting.  "Just remember this, Constantine.  I may 
seem like a "sister" to you, but I am a goddess.  My domain is 
mystery."  She stepped up close to Constantine and gave him a 
cat-like smile.  " And you, my dear Constantine, intrigue me _very_ 
much."

This is great.  This has to be one of the best fanfics to hit the FFML this year, and what's 
even better, there's no Ranma saving the world or someone's soul in it!!!