Sarah: shouldn't you like be doing something productive?

Eric: I am being productive I'm providing helpful criticisms. A simple
minded lout like you would probably not realize this.

Sarah: *flares green* please.. we'll see about that.

Eric: well anyways on to the review!

-----Original Message-----
From: Cherry Blossom <summer_blossom@hotmail.com>
To: fanfic@fanfic.com <fanfic@fanfic.com>
Date: Thursday, November 20, 1997 7:17 PM
Subject: [FFML] [ff]Ranma's Next Generation Ch2

Eric: wherein Ranma and friends meet up with the dumbfounded cast of
Star Trek.

Sarah: William Shatner co-stars as hilarity ensues.

Dim: sounds depressing.

Cubicle: Ooo can i watch it?

Staple Plus: Ooooo i love it when you umble! *grabs Cubicle and drags
him to the floor*

Eric: really it was just a stupid joke.

Here is another chapter.  Read at your own risk.

Sarah: *checks around her* aint no one around.. looks safe.. i say... go
for it!  *flares brightly* 'sides i can handle myself.

____
Ch2
____
  "This is Nerima?"  Akane asked as they steped out of the airport.

Eric: no actually its an road...

Sarah: i never would've realized Nerima would have an airport
considering how small it is.

Dim: its a tiny depressing airport.

  "Yes, Akane.  This is Nerima, the place where I was born."  Caro-
line said kinda sad.  "It is a very weird town.  You'll grow to like
it."

Eric: it grows on you, sorta like a fungus.

Sarah: Soon if you're lucky you'll have lots of guys chasing after you.

  *Yeah right!*  Ranma thought.  *I haven't been here for more than an
hour and I already hate it!*

Sarah: awwww I can already tell i'm not going to like this guy.

  "Is something wrong, honey?"  Caroline said to her son upon noticing
his expressions.

Eric: yes... you make me feel sickly sweet!

  "Nothing, ma.  Don't worry.  It is just that I'm not that use to new
places."  Ranma said with a fake smile.  *You're such a liar, Ranma!*

Sarah: further evidence that Akane is unstable.  This boy talks to
himself!

  "Okay then.  Now, lets go for some ice cream.  I used to go to this
place with..."  Caroline trail off,  "my friends when I was your age.
I hope it is still in bussines.  They have the best sundaes!"

Eric: then there was that time Shampoo busted down the wall...

  Saying so, Caroline called a cab, and the three of them got in (they
don't need to worry about their lougage.  It is already send to the

Eric: lugage... humm you seem to be slipping out of past tense here.

house.)  Caroline asked the cab driver to take them to the ice cream
shop.

Sarah: realy specific directions there pal.

  "That ice cream shop!?"  the cab drive said with excitement.  "Men!

Eric: its amazing... the cab driver knows where THAT Ice cream shop is.

Sarah: by the way it should be MAN!

They have the best ice cream ever!  I had been here for more than 20
years!"

Eric: a well known place.

  "I can't believe it is still in bussines!"  Caroline said happily.

Sarah: oh believe it baby.

Cubicle: *grinning happily and looking disheveled* Oh I BELIEVE now!

Staple Plus: *reaches up and grabs Cubicle* You look sooo cute
disheveled.

Eric, Sarah and Dim: *attempting to avert their eyes*

  "Of course!  I went there when I was a teen!  It was my favorite
places."

Eric: favorite place.

Sarah: *kicking the prone cubicle and staple plus* will you two stop it
before i decide to unleash something at you?

  Caroline and the driver chatted along, while Akane and Ranma kept

Eric: humm... Caroline.. you're in the city!

Sarah: *flares green* i hate you two.

Cubicle and Staple Plus: *cringe*

Sarah: sex here... sex there... no sense of propriety!

quiet.  They both knew what each of them though.

Eric: thought.

Sarah: *power blasts Cubicle and Staple Plus into submission*

Cubicle and Staple Plus: *whimper*

Dim: that was depressingly necessary.

Eric: *shrugs*

  *I hate this place, Akane!  This place will make mom suffer!"  Ranma
said without words.

Sarah: awwww actaully i suddenly like the boy.

  *I undersatan, but for mom's sake we need to act normal.  We cannot

Eric: understand

hurt her more than she is now!*

  *I know.  I just hope we will never meet dad!   I can't say what

I'll

Eric: humm the mystery deepens.

ought to do to him!  I feel this resentment and hate toward him!*

Sarah: perhaps you should try to show this resentment and hate instead
of coming right out and blurting it.  its far to stereotypical.

  *Calm, Ranma! I feel the same too.  But I will try to act normal.

Eric: calm down.

We have to.  I just hope no one finds out that we are here.*

Sarah: say like any of mom's old friends?

  *I hope, Akane.  I hope!*  with this, Ranma gave a sigh and stoped
his thougts.  They had arrieved to the ice cream shop.

Eric: thought bubble empty!

**
Streets of Nerima
**

  Nabiki was walking down the street with all sorts of documents in

her

hands.  It was the price she had to pay to be one of the richest and
most successful bussineswoman in Nerima.

Eric: and what a high reaching goal that must've been

Sarah: she was the most successful in the first place.

Dim: its depressing she hasnt advanced any since then.

  *I should have brought the stupid car!  I'm losing it!!*  Nabiki
thought frustrated.  She wanted to walk, but she never thougth she had
to carry all this junk.

Sarah: perhaps the wanted should be changed to liked.

Eric: She LIKED to walk...

  As she walked down the street all frustrated and cursing at the sky,

Sarah: remove the all.. just As she walked down the street, frustrated
and cursing at the sky, she passed

she passed the ice cream shop.  She looked at it for a few minutes, but
those few minutes were enough for the old memories to come back.

Eric: c'mon give us a clue

Dim: i have a feeling it'll be depressing.

Sarah: ohh do you know i cant stand you!

Dim: i know... it makes me depressed.

  Memories of long ago which she thought gone came back puring in her

Eric: i think it should be pouring.

brain.  Seventeen years had gone by, and only God knew where on Earth
her littles sister was.

Sarah: yes yes a bit of mystery revealed!

  *You did love him, but you lost him to Perfume.*  Nabiki thought
sadly.  *And the death of daddy affected you more.  I hope that,
wherever you are, you are in good health.*

Eric: well actually she's eating ice cream as we speak.

Sarah: hummm perfume? and how did she end up with kids?

  Nabiki continued walking, but as she passed the ice cream shop she
saw something very peculiar.   There, at the end of the shop, were a
woman around her thirties with two kids eating ice cream.  In most
cases, Nabiki wouldn't care a penut about it, but in this case, that

was

Eric: peanut..

super strange.   The boy and the girl looked like replicas of Ran-
ma and Akane.

Sarah: wow uncanny.

  *What the-*  Nabiki shouted in silence.  *This is impossible!*  She

Eric: i think her reaction is a bit understated given the circumstances.

Cubicle and Staple Plus: We---

Sarah: *flickers with power and shoots the two an evil glance*

Cubicle and Staple Plus: *whimper*

let go of the papers and rubed her eyes, but the image was still there.

Eric: rubbed her eyes.

*I have to tell about this!!*

Sarah: WHO! who do you have to tell?

****
Saotome Dojo (currently Tendo)
****

  Nabiki had gone to the nearest payphone and called every single soul
who knew Akane and Ranma to meet her at the Dojo.   When she arrieve
there, everyone was there, including Ranma and Perfume.

Sarah: oh my god... talk about the most insenstive act in hte world.

Eric: jeez you'd think she'd approach her sister instead of dredging up
bad memories.

  "You won't believe this!"  she said catching her breath as she
entered the dojo.  "I-I saw Akane and Ranma!"
  "Wow, hold it!  Akane has dissapear for more than seventeen years,
and I was her the whole afternoon!"

Sarah: this hear sentence makes no sense.  whose talking?

Eric: and does Nabiki realize Akane and Ranma are her sisters daughters?

  "Yes, I saw yours and Akane's replica.  They were with a woman.  She
was quite pretty and she seemed very familiar."  Nabiki said.

Eric: oooohhh the past sentence now makes more sense.

  "But...That's hard to believe!"  Kuno said.  He had became more
calmed.  Over the years, he had matured a lot.

Eric: you have two fragments here why not just join the two.

  In that moment, a boy came to the dojo and delivered a weekly
magazine.

Sarah: At that moment.

  Nabiki glanced at it and saw the same woman she saw in the ice cream
shop.  She grabed that magazine and flicked trough it.  She found what
she wanted.

Eric: she saw the same woman on the cover or something.

  "Listen to this.  'Caroline Tendo, USA most succesful bussineswoman,
comes to Japan with her childre to stablish bussines."
suddenly, Nabiki gasped.

Sarah: either Nabiki is slipping into a some weird accent or she needs a
grammar check.

  Everybody looked at the magazine.  In big print, the following was
marked:  "CAROLINE TENDO WITH HER TWIN SON AND DAUGHTER, AKANE AND

RANMA

TENDO" next to it a picture of them was printed.

Eric: everyone fainted right?

Sarah: and now for my favorite part; the review!

Eric: well, isnt this just strange.  I have to admit two things a> the
story has my intrigued and i would like to know whats happening next and
b> it has some serious grammar problems.

Sarah: oh i agree on both counts.  Also the story is well paced, though
at some points you do tend to get a bit rushed and the plot feels a bit
contrived at that point.  take for instance the boy who delivered the
magazine... it might simply be more useful to have the magazine laying
around the house or have the boy be the mailman.

Eric: its a decent story but you dont necessarily have to rush to get it
done.  It started out better in the beginning and more towards the end
it grew rushed.

Sarah: until next time... I look forward to reading the next... *flicks
Cubicle and Staple Plus an evil glare* do you two have anything to say?

Eric: why do you pick on them so much?

Sarah: *shrugs* cuz.

Cubicle: ummm.... *eyes Sarah cautiously* just that I enjoyed the story
too.

Eric: what you were fooling around for most of it.

Sarah: GRRrrrr I hate morons!  *powerblasts Cubicle*