From:          Chan Wei Lik <weimin@pl.jaring.my>
Reply-to:      "weimin@pl.jaring.my" <weimin@pl.jaring.my>
To:            "'FFML'" <fanfic@fanfic.com>
Subject:       Re: [FFML] (draft)[AMG!/Hellblazer] Dire Fates - pt 1
Date:          Fri, 21 Nov 1997 00:16:16 +0800

I love to see how this one pans out. But could you not put the Japanese 
dialog in <> brackets please? It makes it seem like they're thinking, not 
talking.
Second, contrary to popular opinion, Peorth's domain is NOT forever. The 
closest possibility is mystery.

What should the <> be instead? {}?

I'll have to rethink the "forever" line.

How would this be?

Peorth stood up, pouting.  "Just remember this, Constantine.  I may 
seem like a "sister" to you, but I am a goddess.  My domain is 
mystery."  She stepped up close to Constantine and gave him a 
cat-like smile.  " And you, my dear Constantine, intrigue me _very_ 
much."


-David Tai

(No, it is NOT Dai.  Anyone who brings that up again will die.)