Phillip Masters wrote:

Well, it's well done for the most part, though it's ground covered at
least twice before.  The interaction between Ranma and Akane was done
beautifully, as was Ranma's reaction on seeing his child.  The decision
to use the doctor's POV was an intelligent one; of the characters in the
story, he's the one with enough detatchment from the couple, yet is a
central part of all the action.

However, I had a serious problem with the ending.  To put it bluntly, it
was too fast and too blunt.  

     "What is it doctor?"  Akane asked, worried.
     "Well, it was a boy... I'm sure of it." he answered.
     Akane stared, shocked.
     Ranma passed out.
     The doctor was confused.
     The nurse was... the nurse.
     The baby, well, the baby was cursed.
     Go figure.

At the risk of sounding rude, you're doing the reader a disservice by
ending it like this.  The reader could figure out on its own that it was
cursed.  A better way of handling it would be to combine Ranma and
Akane's reactions into one paragraph, then giving a small description of
the baby girl in their hands.

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PMasters

-- Nick