How did you like that story? Pretty hard to follow, right? I wanted

an interesting and intriguing plot, but I guess I overdid it and made it
confusing.<<

It was worse than that. It utterly failed to invoke an emotional response. 
There was nothing in the story to make me feel anything at all.

not all stories have to provoke your emotions.. spurring you to think is
just as good..

Oh yeah, why didn't Ranma just use the mirror to go back to the correct 
time after realising his mistake? Maybe he was a little too eager to die.
He read the journal, but how did he miss the message he himself wrote at 
the end?

you can't messs with fate.. didn't you read it?

When did he find the time to locate Colonge's ancestor, let alone take the 
time to teach those techniques? Also, how did he realise who she was? You'd 
think that he would have headed strainght back to the present after 
surviving the assasination attempt.

that's one of the few things i had a problem with.. should explain how Ranma
found the girl..

        
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