Will will provide the main feed back but I have a couple of personal comments.

First off I'm sickened to think that you could assume that Darien was *any*
sex interested in Serena. Second I'm having a hard time grasping whether or
not you acutally like this story or not. For lack of any substantive
comments, that I could see, and the general tone I'll assume you disliked it.


Doug

"I write in broad tapestries, interweaving characters lives leaving
 the little details to the reader unless the detials are important."
	- Anne McCafrey

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