I would suspect that this incident will lead to Noriko having a bit more 
sympathy with Ranma's plight.  After all, this time SHE was the one who 
broke the wall--Think anyone will believe her when she says it wasn't 
her fault...?

--Freemage

From: KLEPPE@execpc.com (Gary Kleppe)
To: Raphael See <raphael@asu.edu>
Cc: Fan FictionML <fanfic@fanfic.com>
Subject: Re: [FFML] [FF][R1/2] Scoop of the Day, Chapter 5
Date: Wed, 22 Oct 1997 03:23:13 GMT

The beginning of this was very enjoyable. I liked the interplay between
Ranma and Akane, and the Noriko/Suzuki scene.

The fight with Kuno was quite well written, but I really couldn't see
the point of it. It doesn't seem at all relevant to the major conflicts
of the story (unless this is something else Ranma is going to get 

blamed

for). It's also OOC for Kuno, I think. Sure he's a jerk, but he does
have a certain amount of chivalry and I can't see him going all-out
against a woman of unproven fighting skill.

If it's necessary for the plot, Ye Olde True Blunder could delay Noriko
just as well by saying he has an important statement for the paper that
she just has to listen to, and then ranting on pointlessly.

Waiting for the next part.... :)


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics

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