This isn't so bad. I mean, this is *true* revenge, a classic
"be-careful-what-you-wish-for". And you didn't get dumped in the
Nyannichuan! For that alone you deserve praise. :)
Truly this was a decent job. Either ending was good, and the second
was more depressing than the first. If you *do* go with the second
ending, though, cut out the part about the self-regeneration, since it
becomes somewhat irrelevant in those circumstances.
-Richard
sterman@sprynet.com
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