The Eternal Lost Lurker wrote:

        The Senshi stared at Shampoo, eyebrows raised. For her part, Shampoo
didn't care much about current events in Japan, and so wasn't impressed by
the Senshi. "Hmph. Silly sailor girls in too-short skirts no keep Shampoo
from airen.

Shampoo has a dress that shows just as much leg as the sailor skirts, except
that it's (a) very tight and (b) slit up both sides to her hipbones.  I can't
see her making this comment. 

Shampoo throw all four out, and stupid tux-boy too." She hefted
her bonbori.
        Ranma sighed. "Just great."
        Venus scowled. "You asked for it...VENUS LOVE-ME CHAIN!" The glowing
golden chain of hearts snaked out, and wrapped around Shampoo's bonbori.

She *aimed* at the bonbori?  Why?  In the first version, she aimed at Kodachi. 

The Amazon tugged on her weapons, while Venus tugged on the chain from the
opposite end.
        "SPARKLING WIDE PRESSURE!" Jupiter threw her thunder disc at Shampoo. 
The Amazon cried out in pain as the high-voltage attack struck her, 

Oh, come now.  Shampoo's not a dolt -- not about fighting, anyway.  I'm sure
she would drop her weapon and at least *try* to dodge.

and she was
flung into the hallway through the hole she had made in the wall. 

Three words:  Kiss of Death.

        Ranma sighed. "This is all my fault. I'm sorry everyone."
        Venus shook her head. "How could it be your fault?"

Why is Ranma claiming the blame here?  

        "They followed *me* here."

Old Scratch is probably used to the chill by now.

        Ami's brow furrowed. "Well, we had assumed when we heard that horrible
crash, that a monster had gotten in here. But it was just Ranm...err, those
people." Ranma winced.
        "Yeah? So?" Makoto said.
        "Think about it," Ami continued. "The Sailor Senshi show up in a hospital
room, and eject a group of unwanted intruders, claiming to be protecting a
friend."
        "I see," Mamoru said. "You're afraid that they're going to start wondering
what's so important about Usako."
        "And what Ranma's connection to us is," Ami added.

Ranma's connection to the Sailor Senshi is that they all want to marry him. 
This is the simple, obvious, and wrong conclusion that every single one of
Ranma's girls will instantly leap to. 

        The group sat in silence for a moment. Finally, Ranma groaned.
        "Shit," he said. "Knowin' them, they're gonna figure out who Usagi is...oh
great."
        "Let's hope not," Minako said. "Let's hope not."

Knowin' them, they're not gonna figure out jack shit.  

-- David.