At 07:48 PM 19/10/97 -0500, The Eternal Lost Lurker wrote:

Here's the new version, with the OOC parts rewritten, so that the episode
culminates in pretty much the same ending...but no longer has the
questionable behavior which was the single downfall of this episode.

C&C please!

Ah, much better. The ending seemed more in line with the series as a whole. 
And Kunou is much, much more... Kunouish. Although it seems like Kodachi
left a little too early in the piece without boredom as well as
figuring out nothing important was happening.

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