While I'll miss Urd in this part, I must say that you did and excellient 
job anyway. Especially with Aeka's apology to Ryoko. I must have reread it 
a dozen times by now.
Perhaps you should consider rewritting some of the internal monolouge of 
the characters. They're speaking to themselves remember? The way you write 
makes it seem as if they were talking to another person or having a split 
personality problem. Other than that, it's perfect. I'll be looking forward 
to reading the rest of it.