From: Lilin XVIII <lilin@ufl.edu>

Not bad, not bad.. I hope this isn't meant to be in script=20
format forever though... =20

Not sure at moment. I'll leave this up for a vote. So far 2 prose and 1
script.

The vows were perfect, well-suited=20
for Nab's vicious sense of cynicism.

I enjoyed writing them a bit too much ;)

Has anyone ever figured out why Shamps hates Mousse?

Would you like someone who hounded you're every move. Proclaims love to
you at the drop of a hat. Generally annoys you to no end. And
constantly makes you look bad in front of someone you do like/love.

I've envisioned a scene... (script to save space only)

Shampoo: Stupid duck-boy worthless!
Mousse:  And turning into a *cat* is any better?

Mousse insult Shamps? Not likely at given circumstances. Though I suspect
if he ever did start talking back to Shampoo, he would stand a better
chance of getting her. As it is she sees him as a spineless fool.

One of these days, Shamps'll do something & back Mousse into a corner, I
shudder to think what he might do then...

One of two things:

1. Mousse becomes Cat Cafe special meal of the day.

2. Mousse retailiates in self defense and defeats a surprised Shampoo.


From: Mark Premo <prime1@oakweb.com>

Author's Note:
Please tell me what you think of this chapter.

Real good, but you might want to add a revison to the wedding scene.  i
don't know what i'm thinking when i think this, be warned... when the
minster reads through the part about no man, woman, beast ect... disturb
them have each appear.

I generally don't know what I'm thinking either. But I feel your scene
would work a little differently.

Minister: and let no man...

Man: i am prince dinga-danga-dong. i have come to wed you Tendo Akane!

Ranma chi blasts him out the door, knocking him out.

Minister: (getting nervious) ...woman...

Woman: i am princess sou-orpha (think deranged soap opra). Ranma i shall
have you as my husband!

Naah.. more like:
Woman: I can not allow this wedding, for I am promised to Ranma by an
arrangement made by my father and Saotome Genma.

Genma big sweets.

Ukyou: Sit down, shut up, and join the Ranma ex-finacee club. You're
member number 6 or 7.

Woman: And you are?

Ukyou: Ukyou, Member number 2, I think.

Woman: The engagement is off?

Ranma: Yes.

Woman: Oh good. I didn't want to get married anyways.

She turned and walked off.

Minister: (Getting REAL nervious) ...beast...

Dragon: (sticking his head and some of his neck through the doorframe)
Tendo Akane! i am destined to feast upon your flesh (clean your heads out
hentai('s))!

Group of old bald guys: Get it. It's a dragon with hair.

Dragon flies off being chased by the bald men.

Minister: (sweat-drops appear)...demon...

Demon: (climbing out of a hole that opened in the middle of the dojo)
your souls shall be mine!

Kuno attacks it with a glowing sword that formed in his hand at the
appearance of the demon.

Kuno: By honor and by rights, I Kuno Tatewaki must uphold the family duty
to cleanse this world of all demons.

That said, Kuno word split the demon into two. The demon and sword
disappeared. The guest were stunned.

Kuno: You may proceed with out interuption.

Minister: (VERY pale)...nor any other living or...

Girl: (debatable) Daveed, give back to Azusa!

She pulled on Ranma's suit and then noticed Ryoga.

Azusa: Charlette!

Ryoga booted Azusa out of the dojo.

Minister: (white as a ghost)...unliving being...

Skips Akane's bad cooking reference, do not want R&A to fight at their
wedding. Goes with:

A phanthom creature appeared next to Ranma.

Gosunkugi wishpered: Kill him.

Akane punches at the phantom but screams in pain as she conects. Gosunkugi
horrified at he sight dispealed his only success at magic to date.

hope this gives you some ideas...

Some. Interesting ideas. I might just add this.

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