Subject: Re: [FFML] [Fanfic][Ranma]Trapped Chapter 4 [draft]
From: "Mark Premo" <prime1@oakweb.com>
Date: 10/13/1997, 4:14 AM
To: "Lord Archive" <archive@mich.com>
CC: "FFML" <fanfic@fanfic.com>
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Author's Note:
Please tell me what you think of this chapter.

Real good, but you might want to add a revison to the wedding scene.  i
don't know what i'm thinking when i think this, be warned... when the
minster reads through the part about no man, woman, beast ect... disturb
them have each appear.

Minister: and let no man...

Man: i am prince dinga-danga-dong. i have come to wed you Tendo Akane!

Minister: (getting nervious) ...woman...

Woman: i am princess sou-orpha (think deranged soap opra). Ranma i shall
have you as my husband!

Minister: (Getting REAL nervious) ...beast...

Dragon: (sticking his head and some of his neck through the doorframe)
Tendo Akane! i am destined to feast upon your flesh (clean your heads out
hentai('s))!

Minister: (sweat-drops appear)...demon...

Demon: (climbing out of a hole that opened in the middle of the dojo) your
souls shall be mine!

Minister: (VERY pale)...nor any other living or...

Girl: (debatable) [insert cute french name here], give back to Azusa
(pulling on Ranma's Tux)!

Minister: (white as a ghost)...unliving being...

????: Mommy! (an unrecanizable blob runs?... clarws?... slithers?...
????... twards Akane)

Ranma: i thought that thing was dead.  won't you ever learn to kill the
food and THEN cook it Akane?

Akane: how dare you insult my cooking! Ranma no Bakaaaa!!!!

(fade to sounds of intense pain)

hope this gives you some ideas...
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