any c&c most appreciated. i think this fic gets a bit too um
convoluted? lost? switching back n forwards and using different
names. mmm and it doesn't flow as much as i had hoped. does it
make sense? should it be shorted or lengthened a bit more?
i've got another sazan eyes fic thats 99% done.
wow, i did two little fics in a weekend!!
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"Into this void I will give my self-control,
inside this noise is a weak and godless soul."
- Flesh by KMFDM.
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Sazan Eyes : Presence of Three
>From the Ed Wood School of FanFiccing
entropy@mpx.com.au
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Timeline wise, this takes part after the battle at Aberdeen
in Hong Kong, just before the end of the first OAV series.
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__o%O%o_-/\-[ Presence of Three ]-/\-_o%O%o__
"I will not have you interfere Sanjiyan! You WILL play your
part in Kaiyanwang's resurrection. Like it or not, you will play
your part."
"I will not willingly help you raise that butcher and you know
it."
Sanjiyan looked across the jetty at Benares. His blood red
eyes glowed faintly in the poor lighting. Her central eye stared
him down while her secondary eyes looked around.
"I can feel your shadow friends Benares, I always knew you were
incapable of doing anything on your own."
"We will see Sanjiyan, we will see."
"In the name of Benares, come forth Houasyou!"
A large black snake slid out of from the darkness, along the
jetty toward Benares. Picking it up he barely glanced at it.
"A snake Benares, oh my! How afraid should I be?"
He smiled at her haughtiness and patted the snake.
"Time to go to work my servant. CHOANG-RIN-RIN!"
Houasyou writhed around in agony, getting smaller and smaller.
Sanjiyan stared at him. at it. Her face, a mask of
bewilderment. It was definitely not the out and out frontal power
attack that she expected. She watched the snake twist and
shrink, its colouring turning from a darkness to a more
translucent, more purple colour, until there was nothing left but
a softly glowing light emanating from Benares' cupped palm.
"Now the fun begins Sanjiyan, shall we see just how powerful
the Seima Queen really is?" He leapt forward, his fingertip
extending out towards her.
Sanjiyan reacted slowly. after the fact. Benares's fingertip
shot forward making contact with her forehead, a purple diamond
glowed softly on embedding itself within her skin just above her
central eye.
"Aaaargh." Her eyes roll wildly in pain, coming back to focus
on her enemy as she staggers. "Foolish Wu!" She swooned, sagging
to the ground.
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Houasyou stood silently behind the tree, studying her quarry.
A young child of about 6 years of age, her black hair was pulled
back into a tiny ponytail and wearing a short ragged dress stood
just across from another woman.
"What's going on Onechan? I'm scared." the child said. Pai
clutched at herself. Something definitely felt wrong.
Houasyou took in the other woman, Parvati. She was beautiful.
Looking in her mid twenties she was tall and slender with pale
long limbs with hair reaching down to her waist tied back in a
pony tail. She was wearing a sleeveless shirt and buckskin pants.
The image it projected was now one of being very much a fighter.
"Not now Pai. First we must deal with Benares then I'll deal
with you, now be quiet and let me concentrate child."
"But-"
"I said, not _NOW_" stubborn child.
Houasyou stepped out from behind the tree, running directly at
the Sanjiyan. Their arguments would help with her surprise
attack.
"Onechan!" Pai said, thrusting her little finger out behind
Parvati. "Watch out." she cried.
Parvati shoved Pai off to the side as she turned to meet the
intruder. Hoasyou continued on directly to the older woman, she
had to take them both out to gain control. The two women met in
a show of force, both vying for the upper hand.
Pai looked on not knowing what to do. She was too little to
help Onechan fight the intruder. The fighting scared her. No
one but Uncle Yakumo and Fei-Oh ever came to visit here and they
never fought.
She stepped back a few paces, horror filling her eyes. Onechan
was blasted backwards by an attack. She turned around and fled
into the forest.
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Benares slapped her flailing arm aside and pined her down. She
continued to struggle against the spell. He pushed another purple
diamond on her forehead, right onto the lower left corner of her
central eye.
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Houasyou knocked Sanjiyan down and watched as the child started
off into the forest. The little brat couldn't run too far. She
started to follow through the forest and continued forwards until
the trees thinned out into a clearing.
Pai backed up across the open space, watching the woman advance
toward her. fear. She was afraid of what this nasty woman was
going to do. a disturbance? some kind of coldness?
"You- You don't belong here, you'd better go now before Onechan
comes!" She said it with all the false bravado she had. Her big
sister had always looked after her, she could count on her.
"Oh, I really don't think so." She raised her palm toward the
child and fired and blast of force.
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Benares placed the third diamond into position on the prone
Sanjiyans forehead as she twitched and writhed on the ground. He
sealed shut her central eye. Light from the triangular formation
flickered wildly then dimmed.
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Parvati burst into the clearing as Pai's little body crumpled
to the ground. She clutched at her head screaming, blood
trickling down out her left nostril and ears.
"Nooooooo! Pai!" She turned from look at the tiny body to
that of its destroyer and began mustering her power.
"You wont have me so easy you snake bitch." she ground the
words out between painful breaths. Raising her palm she blasted
Houasyou backward across the clearing.
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Benares looked on, waiting for the sign that indicated
Choang-Rin-Rin had taken.
Sanjiyan cracked her eyes open, ignoring the pounding in her
heard.
"This is for Pai and Yakumo, and for the humans. Let your
master feel the true power." she whispered. pain. lots of pain.
Sanjiyan ground out her sentencing between loud ragged gasps of
breath. Benares looked on stunned as the last of the Sanjiyan
started to glow. She drew together the soul of Pai and the soul
of Yakumo, joining them with the love that was growing there.
"I told Kaiyanwang that hate and killing was not the one true
power, I guess I was right afterall, but so too was he."
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Huang, Ling Ling, Meixing stood on the balcony of Huangs
mansion. Looking down into the harbour and enjoying the evening
when Amaterasu showed her face, lighting up Aberdeen in a
spectacular white glow.
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A faint greyness turns into white. I blink and open my eyes.
The light stings and I cringe. pain. hurt. What's wrong with me?
Yak- Ya- Ya? Huh? I don't remember! I- I was in an accident?
emptiness. my memories hold no clues. An accident? Why don't I
remember? There is a medical band on my wrist with my name.
"Ayanokouji Pai" I say it out loud running my finger over the
biro lettering. It's my name yet it triggers no feelings within
me. Pai. something. Felling less empty I say my name to myself
again. Pai. I like that name. At least that part feels right.
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End Notes
Choang-Rin-Rin (Pierce Spirit Rhombus -> "sazanjik.txt") is the
beast magic Benares uses on Sanjiyan to suppress her powers by
using a beast (Houasyou) to lock them down and control her.
However Sanjiyan is too strong (Pai is the most powerful Seima
and was born in the year of the Heavenly White Dragon.) And from
some old discussion on the Sazan Eyes ML, Choang-Rin-Rin didn't
work correctly because it was only meant to suppress one
personality, but Pai has the Sanjiyan failing whereby her mind
has split into two distinct personalities.
-df
Dark Fiber [Entropic Coders]
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