Part 2 of my review.
Sorry for splitting it up; I was called away
suddenly while writing the first half.

RPM - acct 3/5 wrote:

   "Aaah, that was fun," sighed Urd, flopping down on the living room
couch.  Urd was already seated and commanding the remote control.
Nuku was curled up at the end of one couch, looking rather content.
   "What's on the tube, Washu?" asked Urd.
   "Washu... what?" asked the diminutive mad scientist.
   Urd sighed.  "Washu... CHAN."  Nearby, Nuku giggled at their
antics.  They were so fun, her housemates.
   "Much better.  And for your information, I'm just trying to find my

favorite drama," replied Washu.

Waitaminute...Urd takes command of the remote, but Washu is
looking for her favorite drama?  Did she take the
remote from Urd, use her own "custom" remote,
or is she <shudder> flipping channels by hand?

   Washu raised an eyebrow to the event happening on the couch and was

tempted to take notes.  Kyosuke was on his way to the kitchen, caught
sight of what was happening, and immediately fainted with a nosebleed.

I don't think Kyosuke is *that* fragile to faint.Nosebleed yes.  Blush
yes.  Stutter yes.  Leave
the room shaking and sweating yes.  Faint, I don't think so.

   //...and then Miss Hinako said, 'What stick?'//
   "HAHAHA!  Aw, man, wish I  coulda been there for that."
   //I... wish you were there too.//
   "Um... Akane?"
   //Yes, Ranma?//
   "I... ah... mmmrrfffm?!?!"
   //Ranma?  Ranma?  Hey, what's going on there?//

This is just too good not to follow up!Why not have Akane say in the
beginning
of the phone call that she's watching the show
as they talk (so she call yell at him while
he's being kissed).  That's a classic
Ranma 1/2 situation.
(unless Real World isn't being sent
out live).

Ranma: (he stands there, blinking, for a good solid minute.
       finally, he snaps out of it.)

       ah... ah... (looks at camera)

       I SWEAR, this ISN'T my fault! It's NOT NOT NOT MY FAULT!

Yes, yes...of course it wasn't.  That'snot going to stop Akane from
jumping
to conclusions as usual...

    "Grilling!" they yelled merrily.
   "Haven't had true grilled barbecue in a long while," said Kyosuke.
   Ataru sighed happily.  "Yeah, some nice, normal earth cooking."

Why BBQ?If you must grill, then why not yakitori or katsu-tori?

   Nuku sniffed at the grill and its assortment of meats.  Then she
blinked.  "Fish?" she asked.
   "Yeah, that one's fish," answered Kyosuke, " but I don't think it's

done ye-"
   She ate the fish.
   "-et.  Um..."
   "It was good!  Thanks!" said Nuku happily.

I realize it's cliche and you've already established it as hercharacter
in previous episodes, but cats *will* eat other
meats besides fish.

<KYOSUKE stays silent, but listens and nods ever so slightly>
ATARU:  And, y'know, the way you just can't do anything right
        when they're around?
RANMA:  Mm-hm.
<KYOSUKE nods again>
RANMA:  And the way they get obsessive about stuff, it's darn
        creepy!
ATARU:  And how they try to run your life!
RANMA:  Take your feelings for granted!
ATARU:  Can't take a joke!
RANMA:  Overreact!
ATARU:  Nag!
KYOSUKE:  Slap you around when it isn't your fault!
ALL:  Women!

Uh...while Ataru and Ranma might have legitimate points,most of
Kyosuke's "slaps" come when it *is* his fault.

   "What's wrong with her?" asked Ataru.
   "Must be a woman thing," said Ranma.

Ohh...he deserves a slap just for that remark...

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