On Thu, 25 Sep 1997 20:42:33 -0500, jws1@webtv.net (jeff shelton) wrote:

A small story that hopefully somebody will like and use.

I'm still not totally happy with the talk about reincarnation, but all
I'm doing is playing around with the same sentences. Hopefully  I'm
making sense, if not tell me.

The idea is a good one, I think. That the Goddesses need to reincarnate
every so often is believable the way you explained it, and it also fits
in well with already existing OMG mythology.

The "seperated at birth" angle also worked well -- they ARE remarkably
similar in personality after all.

What is needed, though, is a storyline in which these ideas can be used.
This fic as written is very talky, and there isn't much at all in the
way of conflict. Adding conflict would make the story more interesting
to read. Just as one example, Urd or Skuld might refuse to go along with
the reincarnation, and Belldandy might need to convince them that it's
for the best.


Gary Kleppe
http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics