On Wed, 24 Sep 1997, Mark Doherty wrote:

The other problem I saw was that it seemed to get confusing towards the 
end(ch17 on). Very confusing, a bit muddled, it was hard to keep certain 
scenes straight in the mind.

I had a lot of stuff to keep track of.  Specific comments on what was
confusing would help in trying to fix anything...I'm not confused, so I
can't tell what confuses others :)


John Walter Biles :  MA-History, Ph.D Wannabe at U. Kansas         
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      It sought to scour him to ash, but he would not burn.  It tried to 
crush him, but he would not be broken.  It tried to blow him away, but he 
would not move.  He locked his mind around it and struck back with his 
anger, binding it with the power within himself.  He had gone beyond 
rage, into the calm at the heart of the hurricane of his anger.  By 
turning his anger outward, he mastered it, and now he did the same for 
the power.

                                   --from 'Power', the first third of my
unfinished story, 'Parallel Lives'.