On Tue, 23 Sep 1997, R. D. Beaubien wrote:

What I found a bit confusing was the parts involving Madigan. Just why did
the new Pluto decide that she need to saved. All we found of that was she

She had use for her talents at the time of the fall of the Crystal
Millenium (The section at the end, see Pluto's reference to her 'Inner
Senshi' :))

Also I found it hard to follow what happened to Goto-san and what Pluto
had in store for him. It could of been that I really didn't read the story
close enough, but I found no mention of Goto-san after him meeting Madigan
(I liked the meeting though...:) and I found that a bit confusing too...

No, that's something I have to fix from the first draft.  I was pretty
worn out as I finished off the last chapter and a few subplots slipped
through my fingers.

As for the theolgy side of the story, while I don't neccesiarily share the
fic's or your views on the subject, I did find those sections well
written. You could of fallen into a big pit there in those sections if
they came off a bit too preachy (I know..Bad word use but I can't think of
another one) and may have turned some people off the fic. Instead you were
able to get your message out in a nice way, and I was able to pick the
message out easily (though as said before I may not agree with it....:)

Thanks :)


John Walter Biles :  MA-History, Ph.D Wannabe at U. Kansas         
ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu       
rhea@tass.org              http://www.tass.org/~rhea/falcon.html
rhea@maison-otaku.net      http://www.maison-otaku.net/~rhea/

      It sought to scour him to ash, but he would not burn.  It tried to 
crush him, but he would not be broken.  It tried to blow him away, but he 
would not move.  He locked his mind around it and struck back with his 
anger, binding it with the power within himself.  He had gone beyond 
rage, into the calm at the heart of the hurricane of his anger.  By 
turning his anger outward, he mastered it, and now he did the same for 
the power.

                                   --from 'Power', the first third of my
unfinished story, 'Parallel Lives'.