A few more comments

At 11:47 PM 9/19/97 -0500, Ranma Al'Thor wrote:

      "If I had realized what fell from the sky that day..."   He reached
next to him towards the sword that sat next to him.

When was the Tsukunga Blast in Siberia? (I can never remember if it was
190x, 191x, or 192x)

Chapter 1:  Tales of the ADPolice
           or
           COPS:  Mega-Tokyo

    "Just cruise around the city until we get a call.  We're on patrol,
which basically means..."

    "We listen to the radio and eat junk food until they call us."
Mihoshi pulled into the parking lot of a Circle K.  "I guess we'd better
load up."

    Maybe this won't be so bad after all, Leon thought.

<g>

      Andrea nodded.  "US Robots and Mechanical Men got the Robotics
code passed in the 2020s.  Any robot that doesn't have the 'US Standard
Robotic Behavior Code' hardwired into it is illegal.  This prevents the

Anything like Asimov's Three Laws of Robotics (or whatever it was called)

few trainstations.  "Maybe I can show you around town later when we get

I think 'trainstations' is two words

    "So you placed a new agent in the ADPolice without consulting me,
Adam?"  Quincy said.

My first thought was that you were crossing over into Mike Breen's
BGC-Highlander crossover. In that one, Adam Pierson (AKA Methos) is one of
Quincy's Special Assistants

I think I read too much fanfic sometimes  <g>

    "He's now in the Charles Dexter Ward home for the Mentally Injured.

I think 'home' should be capitalized, seeing that it's part of the name of
the place

the blonde woman driving it.  "Yeesh, when the police can't manage to stay
on the right side of the road..."

I think they drive on the left in Japan  <ducking>

(at least they did when I was there)

businesspeople, she thought.  Doesn't anyone on this planet believe in 

I think 'businesspeople' is two words

"I'm sorry.  I was just trying to check the pricetag and the whole thing 

and I think 'pricetag' is too words as well

    Macky emerged from the Silky Doll and soon found a man pinned under
the fallen clothing rack.  He quickly checked the man, who seemed to be
not too badly injured, but he went ahead and ran back inside and called
for an ambulance.  I wish I knew more first aid, he thought.  

In both BGC 2 and 7 Mackie is seen tending to injured Knight Sabers. I'd
suggest he knows a bit more than just basic 'first aid'.

     "And Largo was just this goofy blond boomer.  He looks like a goofy

Largo had a couple different hair colors, but he was never blond  ^_^

     Linna shrugged.  "Wasn't she at level 12 last week?"

     "Yes, but last week she had hacked in and reset the difficulty
levels to half their normal rating.  She only made it to the equivalent of
level 8 on the correct scale.  And she only made it to eight because she
augmented her suit's simulated abilities."  Macky looked through the
window, watching the big floating star chase Nene, who was running
desperately avoiding the shots it was firing at her.

Been reading fanfics by Marco de la Cruz?  ^_^




Later!


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