Subject: Re: [FFML] Dance of Shiva, Chapter one, Draft 2
From: Barry Cadwgan
Date: 9/21/1997, 5:13 PM
To: Jeanne Hedge
CC: "Ranma Al'Thor" <ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu>, fanfic@fanfic.com
Reply-to:
bcadwgan@fl.net.au

Jeanne Hedge wrote:

A few more comments

At 11:47 PM 9/19/97 -0500, Ranma Al'Thor wrote:

      "If I had realized what fell from the sky that day..."   He
reached
next to him towards the sword that sat next to him.

When was the Tsukunga Blast in Siberia? (I can never remember if it
was
190x, 191x, or 192x)

Siberia in June, 1908.


Chapter 1:  Tales of the ADPolice
           or
           COPS:  Mega-Tokyo

    Maybe this won't be so bad after all, Leon thought.

<g>

Famous last words.. 

    "So you placed a new agent in the ADPolice without consulting
me,
Adam?"  Quincy said.

My first thought was that you were crossing over into Mike Breen's
BGC-Highlander crossover. In that one, Adam Pierson (AKA Methos) is
one of Quincy's Special Assistants

I think I read too much fanfic sometimes  <g>


No such thing!

the blonde woman driving it.  "Yeesh, when the police can't manage to
stay
on the right side of the road..."

I think they drive on the left in Japan  <ducking>

(at least they did when I was there)

Yup, British standard.

    Macky emerged from the Silky Doll and soon found a man pinned
under
the fallen clothing rack.  He quickly checked the man, who seemed to
be
not too badly injured, but he went ahead and ran back inside and
called
for an ambulance.  I wish I knew more first aid, he thought.

In both BGC 2 and 7 Mackie is seen tending to injured Knight Sabers.
I'd
suggest he knows a bit more than just basic 'first aid'.

Of course he could have other motives.. ^_-


     "And Largo was just this goofy blond boomer.  He looks like a
goofy

Largo had a couple different hair colors, but he was never blond  ^_^

     Linna shrugged.  "Wasn't she at level 12 last week?"

     "Yes, but last week she had hacked in and reset the difficulty
levels to half their normal rating.  She only made it to the
equivalent of
level 8 on the correct scale.  And she only made it to eight because
she
augmented her suit's simulated abilities."  Macky looked through the
window, watching the big floating star chase Nene, who was running
desperately avoiding the shots it was firing at her.

Been reading fanfics by Marco de la Cruz?  ^_^

Heh!  It _is_ playing her strengths.. and keeps Sylia on her toes...

-- Barry Cadwgan ( BCADWGAN@FL.NET.AU ) http://www.users.fl.net.au/~bcadwgan/homepage.htm "The end does not justify the means. The end is the sum of the means, as the road travelled determines the destination." Valijon Starbringer (Hellflower Trilogy, Eluki bes Shahar)