a rather amusing short little fic there...

one thing... PARAGRAPHS!!!

okay well anyways i liked the technique at the end

--Eric

-- 
"I always hated stories that ended poorly. I
always felt cheated.  But you can't feel cheated
forever.  And then she woke up...
I suppose there are worse endings."
--Rose Walker, Lost Hearts
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