actually this was a rather amusing story.  should watch the little
typo's here and there and the formatting.  but it was amusing.  

i'm kinda interested to know whats going on.

one suggestion though might be to set a time frame.  it would seem that
this story would have to take place sometime early.  

*ponder*

anyways i like the little humor bits.  especially shampoo's american
joke.

--Eric
-- 
"I always hated stories that ended poorly. I
always felt cheated.  But you can't feel cheated
forever.  And then she woke up...
I suppose there are worse endings."
--Rose Walker, Lost Hearts
http://www.erols.com/eda104/