I enjoyed this story  so far other than a strong urge to jump on the
author for stopping in the middle of a scene. I HATE cliffhangers. I
know they are sometimes necessary and sometimes unavoidable but I HATE
CLIFFHANGERS!!!

The story is well written and takes a different approach to the subject
than most of stories, that I've read. The Spelling and Grammar were
quite good and it appeared to have been well edited. IT JUST ENDED A;
get  a hold of your self Rick; couple of paragraphs short of a chapter.
 I am looking forward to the next section. SAY IN THE NEXT COUPLE OF
DAYS OR THE AKANE COMES AFTER YOU. I can afford to hire Nabiki to see
that you are inspired.

Good luck

Rick Robinson

rik@cfanet.com