A while ago I released "Hot".
There was a passage in "Hot" that only came about 50% of the
way to where I was hoping it to go:

	   	Ranma stared openly a moment. To call it a
	halter seemed so out of place, since 'halt' neither
	described its apparent function, nor was 'halt' any
	part of the message it screamed in Ranma's mind. 
I was really hoping to plant a lot of images in the readers mind:

- 	The bouncing and rocking of Nabiki's breasts, (Whithout
	using the word Breast).

-	The fact that the Halter utterly failed to halt them.

- 	The raw physical attaction that Ranma felt.

-	His gratitude at the failure of the Halter to halt them.

- 	The halt imperative (meaning "Stay Away") pun,
	junxtaposed against the imperative sex appeal of such an
	outfit.

-	The realization that "Halt" had failed not just once, but
	twice to discribe the moment.

-	The wonderment at the failure of the language.


Would anyone else like to take a stab at this?


J.