As I said with the first draft, this is an exceedingly well
written story but the entire treatment of the Jusenkyo curses as well as
your depiction of Shampoo and Mousse as the Couple of Destiny(tm) managed
to ruin it for me.
	BTW, _why_ are the Joketsuzoku neccesarily a dead-end society 'Poo
is better off as having abandoned entirely?

HTG (Joketsuzoku Anti-Defamation League)