Ah, what the hell. Chapter 3 still hasn't been sent to prereaders yet,
but I may as well release this to the FFML. There might have to be
a two week stretch until chapter 3 is released, to give the prereaders
a decent chance to have their say on it. As a small note, this series
will not go beyond 4 chapters. Probably should have mentioned that in
chapter 1. Reply and I might write faster(Hah, believe that and I
have a nice bridge I can sell... what do you mean they can hear 

everything

I'm typing?) ^_^

If you can resolve this in two more chapters, more power to ya.  
Personally, I've enjoyed it so much I would be willing to read ten....


One thing, though--I think you've mishandled Kasumi just a touch.  Yes, 
I know she's an airhead, but she is usually a compassionate one--enough 
so that I find it stretching the point to have left an injured Genma in 
the middle of the sidewalk.  She's not *that* ditzy (OTOH, maybe she 
realized the scum deserved to lie there, bleeding into the gutter, 
slowly getting weaker as the darkness encroached--Damn, this story makes 
me hate Genma more and more each chapter....)

--Freemage


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