Soren Smith wrote:

Ah, what the hell. Chapter 3 still hasn't been sent to prereaders yet,
but I may as well release this to the FFML. There might have to be
a two week stretch until chapter 3 is released, to give the prereaders
a decent chance to have their say on it. As a small note, this series
will not go beyond 4 chapters. Probably should have mentioned that in
chapter 1. Reply and I might write faster(Hah, believe that and I
have a nice bridge I can sell... what do you mean they can hear

everything

I'm typing?) ^_^

If you can resolve this in two more chapters, more power to ya.
Personally, I've enjoyed it so much I would be willing to read ten....

One thing, though--I think you've mishandled Kasumi just a touch.  Yes,
I know she's an airhead, but she is usually a compassionate one--enough
so that I find it stretching the point to have left an injured Genma in
the middle of the sidewalk.  She's not *that* ditzy (OTOH, maybe she

True, but Takahashi mishandled her worse when she had her hanging
cats on an ailurophobe.  The important thing is, that it really was
funny.  

realized the scum deserved to lie there, bleeding into the gutter,
slowly getting weaker as the darkness encroached--Damn, this story makes
me hate Genma more and more each chapter....)

I'm seriously considering trying to write a story with Genma as the
good guy.  But it's a tall order.