Christopher Angel wrote:

OK, here's the final version of Chapter 1.  Tell me what you think.

I like it.

Many self-insertion 'fics are marred by poor writing, probably because the poor
sap doing the writing is too involved in wish fulfillment to pay attention to
the technical aspects, such as "story" and "plot".

You have managed to avoid this trap, added a dash of humour, and put
a nice hook on the end.

I want to see more of this story.

Where to put Chris's Class?  I can see arguments for each Class.  Class 3
would make sense since he's a new god.  Class 2 or Class 1 would arguably
work better, since one of Chris's duties/titles will be 'Protector of the
Norns' (hey, what are brothers for?).

I think it depends on how quickly you plan to use the "protector" bit, and
whether he needs to learn the powers needed for that duty or whether
they're innate and unconscious.

I'd suggest starting him at the bottom, and having him learn as quickly as
is needed for the story.  Logical, trained thought processes may be an
advantage or a disadvantage.  (I assume he's gonna end up a Class 1.)

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