Christopher Angel wrote:

OK, here's the final version of Chapter 1.  Tell me what you think.

	What can I say, the story is written in the first person, my LEAST
favorite ways to write a story. I generally delete first person stories
automatically. The story is <shudder> a self insertion bit, not that I
have too much room to talk, I AM part of Revenge's End. But, I loved
it!!! It's a bit short so you'll have to be satisfied with the thumbs up
from me until there's more story for me to comment on.

	Not so sure about the name though, Oh My Brother sounds like a Dolemite
title. Oh Brother might work better, ^_^  

OK, here's what I need some help with: 
Where to put Chris's Class?  I can see arguments for each Class.  Class 3
would make sense since he's a new god.  Class 2 or Class 1 would arguably
work better, since one of Chris's duties/titles will be 'Protector of the
Norns' (hey, what are brothers for?).

	Class 1 for the power, Limited so you can ONLY use it when doing your
prescribed duties (a nessicary precaution by Kami-sama, lest his God's
blow their wad before they understand what they are SUPPOSED to be
aiming for). Probably keep your guy from getting so powerful as to make
those of us wary of Self Insertion <GOD! That sounds like a Lemon title
about masturbating, go fig.>  delete it unread.
 

Thanks for the help.

	No prob.
 

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Christopher Angel
cja124@mail.usask.ca      http://www.engr.usask.ca/~cja124
-The road to hell is paved with good intentions. -Old proverb.
-People forget that the same road leads to heaven. -Response

-Luckily, there are plenty of roadsigns, directing you to the nearest
Mcdonalds so you won't get hungry on the trip -Adverb <ahem>...
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